Congratulations are the order of the day
Your brilliant success amazingly outstanding
I have come to offer my respects this May
As your literary efforts are so commanding.
Had I known, had an inkling of this
I’d have come bearing freshly baked cake
Instead I find I write this piece of piss
As tribute to words you with craft take
As words eloquent flow from your pen
I in awe acknowledge your thriving skill
As I know you have struggled, but then
Language you explore but never kill.
My pride bursts forth for you
For I have been on this ride too.
Written for: http://dversepoets.com/2014/05/01/meeting-the-bar-rhyme-and-sonnets/
Morpethroad 
Nice poem or I mean sonnet, I’m sure Shakespeare would be proud….. or amused…. 😉
Thank you Jackie you are very kind, as the rhyme is not really my kind…..of thing…
ha. i may kill language on occassion….
sonnets are a beast….most form is to me…ha
i like my rhyme internal usually…and hey, you wrote
so piss or not. it is what it is and that is something…smiles.
A little license from mr Shakespeare Brian, had to include some reference to him. Thanks for reading, that was a scary event in your neighbourhood what you wrote about.
Sometimes killing languages is not bad… 😉
Rhymes worked fine with me.
Thank Bjorn, you are as always very generous.
Delightful sonnet, definitely a freshly baked cake poem.
Ha thank you so much, drop by I’ll cut you a slice.
🙂
haha… you know…there are days when i prefer freshly baked cake to a poem…esp. if it’s such a challenging form as the sonnet…smiles
Thanks Claudia, having had to teach a few over the years, cake was always a preferred alternative. Thanks for your comment.
Did someone say “Cake”? 🙂
I’d love to be able to hear you read this aloud, Michael, because I think it would illustrate the difference that our natural speaking voices and regional/national accents can make to the way a poem sounds. For example, is brilliant pronounced as two syllables (one stress; brill-yant) or three (two stresses; brill – ee – ant)? The answer is, it depends on who you are, where you grew up, where you live and what your local speech patterns are.
Your rhymes work well – and congratulations on the full-rhyme of commanding/standing where you rightly rhyme and as the stress and then continue through the ing syllable; not everyone realises that this is required to complete the rhyme – and you’ve followed the Shakepearean scheme exactly.
You say that rhyme is really not your thing – and it isn’t to everyone’s taste, nor does everyone find that rhyme comes naturally – so hats off for trying – and congratulations on your success … smiles
Thanks Tony, I am flattered by your comment. I can see your point about pronunciation in fact some years ago I attended a lecture given by a Shakespearean director who argued that we Australians shouldn’t do Shakespeare as we don’t have the right accents. I am more of the thinking that Shakespeare would be flattered to see what we can do with his plays.For me brilliant has two syllables. Again thanks for reading and your comment.
that’s a nice tribute to the Bard…
Thank you Sumana I appreciate your comment.
Shakespeare would be amused at all of us I’m sure …enjoyed this.
Thanks Katy, I think so too.
Very nice. I’m sure you’ve made Mr Shakespeare proud 🙂
Well maybe a wry smile…thanks Charlie…
I liked your poem especially the ending about killing the language. LOL
Thank you Cressida it turned out an enjoyable write. Playing with language, is such fun.
Fruity language was much used by Shakespeare, yet it is wrapped up in the English of his day. Our literature teacher loved revealing the rudities to us – and as 17 year olds, we loved it too! So well done – Will would be smiling, I’m sure! 🙂
Hi Freya, thanks for reading and your comment, my knowledge of Shakespeare leads me to believe he had a sense of humour. I was amazed one time to discover that someone devoted a large portion of their lives to writing a book on Shakespeare’s rude bits. It makes for great reading but I wondered what the guy who wrote it followed up with.
Yes, I suspect that book just might have been a one-hit wonder!
I think you may be right. Have a good day.
How clever are you! I think you did extremely well and good ol Shakespeare would be proud 🙂
Thank you Jenny it was a fun write complete with a Shakespearean reference albeit a crude one.
Crude? No I wouldn’t have said so, you are welcome.
Clever and funny – good sonnet, I enjoyed it.
Thank you Gay, have a good weekend.
Oh, this made me chuckle and you are truly a poet, Michael…a true natural…you can poke fun as well as succeed in writing a sonnet…sheesh!! I really enjoyed this piece.
Thank you Oliana I enjoyed writing this one, about time I paid time back for the hours he made me spend studying his works.
A nice dedication
Thank you very much.
So well done, bringing smiles to my face. Some forms are just hard!
Anna :o]
Thanks Anna, it’s demanding but I had a go.
Again feelings I am so familiar with! Really well done!
Thanks CC, I appreciate you reading and your comment.
Well you baked an amusing sonnet… indeed Shakespeare would have enjoyed this slice of literary cake. 🙂
Thank you so much, not so sure about the literary cake ness of it but it was fun to write.
This made me smile ~ I am happy to see you trying your hand in sonnets Michaelt ~ Form is not my strong suit too but it does stretch the poetic muscles ~ I specially like the ending couplet ~