OpenLinkNight ~ February 2014 – Loss

despair

I wake in this pit.

Sheer walls, rock floor

No chance of escape

I await a hand, redemption.

 

Will I wait long?

Barely space to spread out

My limbs contracting

In this confined space.

 

Ironic that you

Are twisting into shapes

Of pleasure and desire

While mine are torment.

 

I have been here before

When inaction, laziness,

Uncaring, wanton abandonment

Prevails ahead of stupidity.

 

I am lost, alone, destitute

I have been selfish,

Taken you for granted

Cast out is my reward.

 

I express regret

Remorse oozes from my pores

I cry out my sorrow

My abyss is deep.

 

It is your call

You are hurt, beyond words

I reach out, your door shuts

Wallowing in my loss.

 

I am wretched.

 

Written for: http://dversepoets.com/2014/02/25/openlinknight-february-2014/

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41 Responses to OpenLinkNight ~ February 2014 – Loss

  1. Oh my how good are you! That 3rd verse especially, how often we twist in pain when we have lost someone, knowing that they are not… I guess though as you say – never take anyone for granted or you’re bound to be burned. Powerful, well penned Michael.

  2. Wow, that’s brilliant!! 🙂

  3. Consider me impressed Michael wow

  4. Gabriella's avatar Gabriella says:

    Very powerful expression of the pain this person goes through, particularly through the contrast of what the person they took for granted is experiencing at the same time.

  5. brian miller's avatar brian miller says:

    ugh. quite the bit of emotion in this….to know you have done wrong…and have to live with the result of your decisions…still it twists because we have all been there…when that door closes in our face, it stings.

  6. I really like the short and powerful verses and how the poem connects with the emotions evoked by the painting.

  7. JackieP's avatar JackieP says:

    Well written Michael. Sometimes we perceive a loss in our pain, only to find out it was for the best afterwards. During our pain we don’t always see that. Any loss is hard to take and you captured it well.

  8. MarinaSofia's avatar MarinaSofia says:

    The first three stanzas in particular work for me – perhaps because there is little to no explanation in them, so one can put one’s own interpretation on it!

  9. When the only hope for release is mercy.. then wretched indeed.. the way you describe it in terms of a prison.. yes there are those days.. so far mercy have been given…

  10. Anja's avatar Anja says:

    Very strong piece of poetry!

  11. RoSy's avatar RoSy says:

    Deep emotions here. I feel the hurt & the pain of both sides. Although one seems to have moved on – I get the feeling that there may still be some lingering hurt beneath. I think there always is.
    Well – just my thought.

    Hope all is well. 🙂

  12. atrm61's avatar atrm61 says:

    You are in your element here Michael!Loved the poem and the powerful art added to it:-)My fav lines-“I express regret

    Remorse oozes from my pores

    I cry out my sorrow

    My abyss is deep.”Brilliant!

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