Feeling wretched, anticipation, in springtime, you descend into your separate hell. You destroy, maim, injure, your fangs into all and anyone in your path. While nature is renewing outside inside you inflict your own insanity on all around you. Where your part made creatures should be frolicking in the warmth of the sun, they burrow back down bunking in from the onslaught.The arrows you cast find their ready marks, guts burn, dread mounting, we are helpless in avoiding the journey you take, praying for safe arrival, if not slightly bumped and scratched.
devoid of warmth
ignore magic of spring
hormones rampant
Written for: http://haibunthinking.wordpress.com/2014/02/11/haibun-thinking-week-4-february-11th-2014/

What a great and painful sounding Haibun.
Thanks Al, I am trying to write them better, but I will keep trying.
I think you have written it very well 🙂
Thanks Al I appreciate you saying that.
Wow…rather unexpected…this is an interesting aspect of your writing I’d not run into yet!
Thanks Georgia, we all have dark parts to our lives. Thanks so much for reading.
I’m really going to have to pull mine out when I find it. >:-/
Wow! when you write pain, you allow the reader to feel it…well done, Michael!
Thanks Oliana, trying to learn about haibun each week is a real challenge. Thanks for reading.
You know I used to write Haibun without knowing what it was…I liked cutting off my stories with a haiku and loved using Haiku to describe a photo (haiga) …I do love this form.
You should join in Oliana. It is a good writing challenge.
I think I may hv but I run out of time..wirk gets in the way.
I understand.
Quite a chilling read Michael, such venom in this person, hormones rampant an apt description for some one out of control. Well written.
Thank you Jenny.
Very powerful emotions…..I think I know these demons. I have seen them at work in people 😦
This is well written. You have captured the essence…
Thanks so much Courtney that is a very encouraging comment.
Very good…I dare say your best.
Thank you I took notes from a great teacher and have worked on them. I am lucky she is so patient and guiding.
Happy birthday to you.
🙂 awww teachers…aren’t we all still students in this world?
And THANK YOU
Learning something everyday.
The was powerful, such raw emotion is so few words, fab 🙂
Thank you Helen, appreciate your comment.
Emotional words put together nicely.
Thanks Kim, hope you are well today?
Yes and I hope you are too.
Going well today Kim thank you, the sun is shining, all is good.
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So emotional Michael, makes me want to hunker down in my burrow and out wait the arrows flinging around. It might be emotional and a bit dark, but it’s really good writing. And as I can’t seem to do haibuns, I bow to you for doing so well.
Thanks Jackie, that’s an encouraging comment.
While I don’t know much about Haibun, the words you used made a vivid word picture.
Thank you Patricia it was a concentrated effort to produce this piece.
Perhaps that is why we have winter – to rest up for the hormones that will rage – be it animals or the fire fingers of lightning via the weather. Well done.
Thanks Jules, thank you for reading..
AnElephant loves this, Sir ST2, and sees a possible allegory of life, with springtime as the angst-ridden teenage years.
But then, as you are well aware, AnElephant knows nothing!
I think you know something which is always better than nothing. Thanks for the comment.
Powerful words.Dark indeed.
Thank you Paul.
I feel a dark cloud in this one.
Nice Haibun though!
Thank you RoSy, I had fun writing it.