Sunday Writing Prompt: July 30: Surfacing


When she thought about it surfacing was the only alternative.

Apart from the bracingly cold water

The sapping of her breath

There was only one way, and that was up.

Broadsided by recent revelation

News a problem existed.

Momentarily there was a loss of hope

It was a relief if only for a second or two.

The crap in her life weighed heavily

She forgot about the boy who loved and cherished her

Waiting silently in the wings

His arms and lips there for her.

Soaked through she battled upward

Every lie and pretend truth

Deceptive and unforgiving

Designed to control and direct her life

All gathered round her as her mind raced to a solution.

She broke through

Breathed in once again.

She saw him standing in the distance

The casual boy, awaiting the struggling girl

Keen to take her away,

To care and nurture the love they shared.

So, simple she thought,

I’m a girl loving a boy,

Reaching out he took her hand

Pulled her free.

Placing his arms around her

He led her away.


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12 Responses to Sunday Writing Prompt: July 30: Surfacing

  1. There’s something very beautiful about this, and captivating.

  2. scribblersdip says:

    Wow 😀

    I don’t know how you’ve done it – but you’ve captured an essence, a feeling, a sense of the drowning and crush, without being literal – and of the light – which even without knowing how that could manifest, pulls – so the break away – and then seeing where the light source is ….

    hmm …. that probably doesn’t make a whole lot of sense, but as I read this piece, and read it again, I just feel like you’ve captured, how can I phrase this – to steal Milan Kundera’s book title – “the unbearable lightness of being” – from the dark and the shock to a discovery of hope and light – and there is just a rocking soothing easy and grace about this piece Michael –

    okay, I’ll just have to stop – because this is kind of inexpressible on my part –

    thanks for playing the Sunday writing prompt and I hope you have a wonderful week 🙂

    • Michael says:

      Thanks Pat I guess what you are saying is you liked this effort 😊. It was quite a challenge.

      • scribblersdip says:

        yeah, that sums it up – I liked it – but I can’t explain how and why – what you’ve captured ….. it was/is a toughie this time, but people have done some very interesting things – much like yourself 🙂

  3. Oh, I like this. That couplet :
    So, simple she thought,

    I’m a girl loving a boy,

    So simple in itself, and somehow says so much.

  4. Jael Sook says:

    Oh I love a happy ending 🙂

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