She said she hated sunsets and pulled away when he tried to hold her hand. He had an insipid nature that weighed heavily on her.
She tried to move away but the seat they shared didn’t allow for much more manoeuvring once they settled their butts upon its steel frame.
Then there was his endless inane chatter. Usually about his day, what he’d done, didn’t do, with whom he’d engaged and with whom he cemented what he called a meaningful dialogue.
She wondered if that meaningful dialogue sent those so called friends to the tip of insanity as she was feeling right now.
It was when he mentioned going to the nearby hamburger joint that she felt a sense of relief. As much as she didn’t need anything to eat more fatty than a lettuce leaf she acquiesced and lifted herself from the seat. With arms folded she followed him, regret heavy on her heart.
Written for: https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2016/11/21/fffaw-challenge-week-of-november-22-2016/
Well now, she is really in the wrong place st the wrong time. Nice feeling is separation between them
Thanks Mark..
Does her advert on Match.Com read “No walks at sunset?”
Well probably more no sunset sitting….thanks for stopping by.
You can definitely feel a growing distance between the pair, but he is probably unaware…
Yes I would think so Angie rather slow on the uptake..
Seems to me he has more of a personality than she does. She seems very drab to me. Maybe what she sees in him are part of her own personality. Great story, Michael. It makes you stop and think.
Thank you Joy….
I can relate to disliking inane chatter. Think she needs to tell him the truth soon. Nice take.
Thanks Iain, yes I think so too, be irritating wouldn’t it..
One feels sad for them both. An interesting piece of writing.
Thank you Mike…
Wow, sounds like one terrible date. Or is this a relationship after many years, where the love’s gone cold?
I’m not sure the love was above lukewarm Mandi…thanks for stopping by…
Sad tale of what can happen between two people lovers or friends.
I’m very much guilty of inane chatter, by the way, in case you hadn’t noticed.
Yes but Lorraine I am able to look past it….
For which I am grateful.
Don’t be thinking its an easy task Lorraine it takes commitment, focus and perseverance…
I suspected as much — inane chatter is like earworm music.
Lol
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LOL send him my way, people who chatter a lot are great for writing ideas, even if it’s just writing about how they keep on talking on and on and on… and on. I feel for the heartbreak that is coming his way though. I love the way you use words, I had to take out my little note book of new words for this one 🙂
Really how flattering
She really needs to break free from this one – why does she put up with him if she dislikes him so much? Girl needs to grow a back bone. Nice description of her thoughts and feelings, Michael
Thank you Lynn, I think so too…
Say goodbye to bad rubbish 🙂
I’m as guilty of inane chatter as your character and Lorraine 😛 Your story is sad, though. She’s definitely not into it and he must be in denial.
Ellespeth
I think he is completely unaware