
It was our final night.
The cast were up for one more performance.
It had been a wonderful week with packed houses every night.
Tonight the auditorium was packed.
The show had energy, pathos, the music catchy and our band top rate.
As the second act began the audience could sense the show energetically moving towards its climax.
The leading character was about to be killed which led to his love professing her love and loss.
A rumble back stage symbolised the main characters demise. But reality intervened when the guitarist tripped a cord, which knocked over the bass players amp, causing a massive fault, which led to a fire, which led to chaos.
Disaster surrounded us.
People screamed. There was a stampede for the doors.
In the melee people were hurt, some badly, the show ended abruptly.
We were left with nothing but a burnt out band, terrified actors and the memory of a great week badly singed.
Written for: https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2016/02/29/fffaw-week-of-03-01-2016/
That’s certainly not a great ending to a great week. Lot of tribulation in this piece, Michael! Great story telling and a wonderful story!
Thank you Joy, the fiery guitar had me going.
I could tell. You had a lot of wonderful wording and imaging going! 🙂
Oh my. Since you were a drama teacher, Michael, am glad to know this is a flash-fiction piece. Whew, what an ending!
Well in actual fact it’s all sort of true until the end, thankfully that didn’t happen or I’d be still working at the garbage dump separating tin cans from General rubbish. You’d dread such a thing ever happening. Thanks for stopping by Mandy…
Well, I almost forget it was FF–and then at the end, I hoped it was. I pictured your performances being every bit as exciting 🙂
They were but for other reasons none of which were life threatening……
Lol, I’ll bet! 😀
The most threatening moments were leading ladies lacking confidence at the last minute……
I might have known. 😮
But they were fine…..in the end they were magnificent as you would expect…..just a little hiccup.
🙂
😃
Very clever Michael. Disappointing the week had to end with such tragedy. And your last word, perfect!
Thanks Mandi appreciate you taking the time to comment.
Great story! I like the potential play on words of the “burnt out band”
Thanks Sam for your great comment
Woah!!! My jaw just dropped, Michael! What a story you have made!
Ah Rose you are very kind. Thanks for stopping by and reading my post.
Just honest, Michael. 😀
T’was my pleasure.
‘… and the memory of a great week badly singed.’ I really love this line! Great story! 🙂
Thank you so much for your comment glad you enjoyed my tale..
I was all set for a horrific ending, with the hints about the main character’s demise. So it was a real twist that it was “just” a disappointing disaster and not a tragedy! Whew!
Thank you Joy, appreciate you stopping by.
I had no idea the story would end like that…phew! hope you never experienced and ending like that for any of your plays, Michael.
Great story and quite vivid! At least they had a great week before this happened!
That’s not the way they wanted their successful week to end! Great story, Michael. 🙂
Hello Louise thanks for stopping by, no it would be a dampener on the week wouldn’t it…
Not the best way to end a great week of performances.. definitely unforgettable though! Great write, Michael.
Thank you Lori, lovely you could stop by.
any time, Michael 🙂
I could feel the heat. Emotionally and physically! Great story!
Thank you so much. Enjoy your weekend.
You too! You’re welcome!
Talk about your dreams “up in flames”… Well told.
Thank you Roger, a piece of fiction I assure you…
What a commotion!
Indeed.