Mondays Finish the Story – Sept. 7th, 2015 – The Tower


Finish the story begins with:  “As her mount shifted uneasily under her, she grasped the brim of her old felt Stetson, gazed upwards and remembered Jean Pierre.”

It never seemed fair to her that he had spent all those years working on the construction of the tower only to learn that it was temporary and that after the fair they would tear it down.

She saw the tower as a lasting monument to her beloved Jean-Pierre. He had stayed on the job until the last rivet had been banged into position.

She saw the toll it took on him and prayed he would see the job through till the end. She was so pleased when he came home to announce the tower was finished and that he would now be taking a long rest.

But the job had destroyed so much within him. In a few weeks his health deteriorated and he was soon bedridden unable to rise ever again. Always she thought this would be a reminder of her wonderful husband.

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16 Responses to Mondays Finish the Story – Sept. 7th, 2015 – The Tower

  1. Lyn says:

    I wonder how many of the workers on the Sydney Harbour Bridge experienced the same thing? It took 1,400 men eight years to build using six million hand-driven rivets and approximately 53,000 tonnes steel. By comparison, the Eiffel Tower took 300 men two years, two months and five days to build and is made of 2.5 million thermally assembled rivets and 7,300 tons of iron. Both of them are pretty impressive constructions.

  2. Susan Langer says:

    Nice story with that bittersweet ending. I think you might have meant “stayed” instead of “stay” in section 4??

  3. That is so sad! Everytime she would look at the tower she would remember it ultimately killed her beloved husband. Great story Michael!

  4. A story of true and deep felt love from Paris. lovely.

  5. babso2you says:

    Sad ending and lovely earlier memories. Thank you for participating in the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. Be well… ^..^

  6. Really sad. At least the tower wasn’t taken down. Well written story, Michael. 🙂 — Suzanne

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