As they raced down the road she heard him screaming at her to slow down.
The wind and rain mercilessly lashed the car, the windscreen wipers stopped beating in time and the road was a blur in front of them.
‘Got to get a move on,’ she had said resolutely. ‘This storm is making it near impossible to see where I’m going.’
He clung to the doorframe, his knuckles white, his brain fearful of what lay in store.
It was later at the pearly gates that he finally looked at her and she at him. They didn’t need to say any words for their present situation said it all.
The frowns on the Angel Guardians told them all was not well. They both gulped. They both felt a rising wave of guilt begin to flood over them.
The Angels shook their heads, pointed to the door on the left. Therein began eternity.
Written for: https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2015/09/08/fffaw-week-of-09-08-2015/
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Good story.
Thank you Val….lovely to see you stop by.
Prompts are so amazing–what they bring out of each individual who responds.
Uh Oh, doesn’t look too promising for them in eternity. Great story Michael! I guess if there is a good side to it, where ever it is they are going at least they are going there together. 😀
There is that side to it Joy…..thanks for stopping by…
I forgot…thank you for participating in the FFfAW challenge!
my pleasure Joy. Have a great evening…
Thank you Michael! You have a nice evening too.
Oh my, Michael!! what a twist in this story. It is interesting what a photo will conjure up for each person. There’s a thunder storm here tonight which I hope will cool off the heatwave we are having for our Labour Day weekend. A great read, Michael, as always.
Thank you Oliana, yes I was surprised too as to where the story went…..but it sort of happens that way for me…
It is a bit like a stream of conciousness sometimes…your muse took over:)
Happens every time….have a good night…
Thank you, have a great day, Michael!
Oh and I hope it does cool down for you tonight…
Me too but it is not likely…forecast still 28 -30C until the weekend. But the alternative is cold, so I’ll just walk very slowly to work tomorrow.
Together still, but not sure if I’d like it to happen that way 😞 good story.
Thank you Jenny I’m not too sure he would be happy about that either….
Hi Michael. I like the clever way you made us work out for ourselves that couple died in the storm, and that they both had chequered pasts. Good story.
Hi Karen thanks so much for stopping by. Well you know I don’t like to make it too obvious, got to get you to enjoy your visit and work it out….Have a great afternoon…
Eternal condemnation! Love it. 🙂
Thank you tj, lovely to see you stop by….
You never know how much time you have left. Boy, if this isn’t a story that makes you reevaluate what you’re doing with your life! Great job!
Thanks Nortina lovely to have you stop by.
Formal castigation … good write. 😎
Thank you Isadora. Have a good day.
Great story. Oh no, eternity isn’t looking good.
Well no Mandi not for this couple. Thanks for stopping by.
Angels in a car…great concept, great story.
Thanks for stopping by charley.
My pleasure
Oh boy! I can only imagine the argument, if for some reason they get a second chance at life. A reflective piece written well.
Thank you for stopping by and your reflective comment. Have a good day.
Great story, wasn’t expecting the twist. I wonder if they’ll get on well together.
Thanks Sally, one wonders a greater punishment than having to spend eternity with someone you don’t like.
They’ve obviously not lived a particularly good life up to this point to be sent through that doorway! Things are about to get rather unpleasant for them. Good story, Michael. 🙂
Thanks Louise, I think you are right. Maybe an eternity together is their unpleasantness.
Nicely written. I wonder what is in store for them. It doesn’t look too good. As Nortina said, we don’t know how much time we have left.
I think maybe their version of ‘hell’ might be having to spend it together. Thanks so much for stopping by.
It is interesting to see what the photo prompts and free writing conjure up from us. I wasn’t expecting that kind of twist. That sucks for them (to put it lightly), but still, great job with this!
People forget how dangerous even a little bit of rain on the roads can be. Interesting story.
Oh boy! I have a feeling, the left doesn’t signify good. But atleast,they’re together that’s something :). Love the suspense leading up to the final paragraph.
Thank you Ameena, have a good day…