This week’s prompt: ….the suitcase lay open…..
Six a.m. Alarm. Today’s the day. Our big trip. Weeks of planning. Get up now, dress, breakfast, await the taxi.
Our packing we finalised before bed.
I hurry through my morning ritual, calling her name. Silence. In the spare room her suitcase lays open, clothes strewn over the bed.
Running frantically through the house I find her. She sits drinking coffee.
‘Our passports,’ she says. ‘Are out of date.’
Tearfully she reminds me she did ask me to check them.
Written for: https://jfb57.wordpress.com/2015/01/27/100-word-challenge-for-grown-ups-week-5/
Oh gawds that has happened to me lol i rememner the utter sick feeling. Actually i meant to ask you if you would honour me with some of your creative words for my fictional writing prompt, heres the link:
http://eclecticoddsnsods.com/2015/01/27/eclectic-corner-5-story-prompt-fictional-writing/
Would be super lovely to see you there 🙂
Funny you should ask as I have a plan to write something for you, I saw that prompt last night and thought I’d give it a go.
oooh now I am excited, you always come up with something super creative 🙂 thank you x
That had me chuckling, Michael. 🙂
Hi Mandy good to know. Hope your day is going well.
Oh that’s a major oopsie. How embarrassing. How dare I say ..male…no? Okay retract that. 😉
Could happen to anyone Jenny.
Yes that it could Michael
Not me corz I’m organised…..
Oh, how terrible would that be! All that excitement deflated in a matter of seconds.
Exactly Aileen, I hope I never find myself in that position.
Uh oh! Someone is in serious poo! I don’t know how she could be sitting there calmly drinking coffee.
The word count meant I had to leave out the bits about steam flowing from ears and the bit about if looks could kill.
Oh no! Lovely writing, the excitement then the disappointment. I like your comment above about word count and what you couldn’t include in the piece. Lol.
Well it’s a reasonable excuse Ruth. Thanks so much for dropping by.
Oh my. They probably didn’t get cancellation insurance either. Good one. 😀 😀 😀
Yes well one of the limitations of the word count such things as his failure to secure the insurance…lol….thanks so much for your comment.
I know, but it’s fun to read between the lines. 🙂
Delightful read with some wonderful touches. The short, sharp sentences and pace at the beginning. The “tearfully” detail at the end.
Thank you Laura, I appreciate your comment please stop by again.
Uh oh, somebody is in real trouble now! Nice frantic pace reflected in sentence structure, well done. 🙂
Thank you Judee. Enjoy your weekend.
Oh, no! That would be awful. Very well-written piece!
Thank you so much Susan and yes it certainly would be.