Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers – Awaiting Grandparents.


It was cold wet and miserable outside, the windows were fogged up, and I kept having to wipe them to see out.

I was expecting my grandparents, and I looked forward to their visit. Mum had said they would be here by mid-morning.

I was determined to wait and see them drive down the street then announce their arrival.

Mum was in the kitchen getting a cake made as she knew Grandad loved chocolate cake.

I looked forward to listening to Grandad tell me tales of when he was a boy. Grandma always bought me something special, and I had a sense of expectation about that.

The morning wore on, and there was no sign of them. The weather did nothing to improve, in fact, it seemed to get darker and bleaker.

By lunchtime, I could sense mum getting worried about them. She had tried to call, but there was no answer.

Life stopped when a police car pulled up outside.


Written for: https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2018/09/10/fffaw-challenge-182nd/

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27 Responses to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers – Awaiting Grandparents.

  1. Hélène Vaillant says:

    How sad and so very real.

  2. Oh! What a heartbreaking ending! A young child anxiously waiting for his grandparents to arrive – then bad news. Great story, Michael!

  3. Jade M. Wong says:

    Oh no, my heart fell when I read the line with the police car. Such a sad ending 😦

  4. michael1148humphris says:

    A well told tragic story which highlights part of the difficult work that police officer have as part of their duty.

  5. syncwithdeep says:

    Ouch! this is heartbreaking.

  6. Iain Kelly says:

    Started out such a warm childhood memory, and then….

  7. James Pyles says:

    That’s pretty horrible. I recently visited my Mom in Southwestern Utah, which is about a nine-hour drive from where I live. I briefly entertained thoughts of what might happen if I should get in an accident. My death would leave my family devastated. Fortunately, I made it down to visit Mom and then back home.

  8. Tournesol says:

    Oh dear, how sad!! You got the reader to get close to the family and imagine how broken they would feel. As usual, such beautiful writing, Michael!

  9. The build-up to that tragic ending was excellent Michael.

  10. Abhijit Ray says:

    Building all the anticipation of grandparents coming then suddenly the anticlimax of police car. Nice twist at the tale.

  11. Eezna says:

    The police car doesn’t necessarily mean a sad end. I take the alternative ending of hope.

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