FFfAW Challenge-Week of May 30, 2017 – Rattled


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The tram came rattling along. It rattled as my life rattles. It’s what happens when you gravitate from one crisis to another. Today the tram was taking me to my doctor. I had been called back and I hated it when that message arrived. He would be so concerned the message would contain an appointment time.

So, off we go, rocking from side to side, thrown around as the tram, an aged tram, that like me is falling apart, rickety bits hanging on, urgent repairs needed for us both.

We part company in the High Street. I walk to the Doctor’s office, his receptionist her usual cheerful self doing nothing to settle my apprehension.

The Doctor calls me in looks down his glasses and read me another version of his riot act.

Chastised I walk back to the tram, this time it is waiting, not moving until it had loaded me, its fragile cargo and we rattle off home one last time.


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14 Responses to FFfAW Challenge-Week of May 30, 2017 – Rattled

  1. What a rattling story. I liked the rocking sense that it conveyed, Kitty

  2. Lyn says:

    I remember the tram from Central Station to Peter’s Corner at Randwick. Traveled on that every time I went to stay with my Aunty Edie (Edith-May) and Nana. It was the anticipation of my holiday that added to the joy.

  3. Iain Kelly says:

    Doesn’t sound like a happy last journey for him on his faithful old tram.

  4. Lynn Love says:

    Love your comparison between the old tram and how your MC feels – clapped out, outdated. A nice analogy. Great tale Michael

  5. I love this, with its genuine, relatable metaphors. Nice writing!
    Going Home
    Annie at ~McGuffy’s Reader~

  6. michael1148humphris says:

    Well you took me on a rather interesting ride. Great

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