November 9: Flash Fiction Challenge – The End

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November 9, 2016 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that pivots around an unexpected ending. If it’s the end of the world as we know it, what is the renewal? You can have history repeat itself. You can include dynamics that never change despite an ending. You can show a triumphant ending. A tragic one. A silly, “That’s all folks!

 

The clocked ticked towards the end of the day. The heat was insufferable. He counted down the final seconds and got up to leave. Grabbing his bag, he made for the lift, the carpark, his car, the trip home, freedom from drudgery.

The lift moved. Then stopped. “Oh no,” he thought. Not now. Suddenly it plunged. Down it went. Around him were the faces of terror. Was this the end?

Then it slowed, he breathed again, the woman beside him spewed, the man opposite covered his wet pants. The lift doors opened.

Where had all the sand come from?

 

Written for: https://carrotranch.com/2016/11/10/november-9-flash-fiction-challenge/

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15 Responses to November 9: Flash Fiction Challenge – The End

  1. Lyn says:

    Only the lift survived. The rest of the building was reduced to…sand 😉

  2. ellenbest24 says:

    A superb take on the prompt and a twist that shocked,. It is very descriptive. 😇

  3. I’m saying its the sands of time. Amazing how when you are in those terror situations how much flashes before your eyes, how you forget to breathe, not realise you’ve wet your pants or had your stomach constrict. A nice ending to a little adrenaline rush that thankfully didn’t have me doing any of the above.

  4. julespaige says:

    And I thought the ‘sand’ from the Sandman of dreams.
    Nice to have so many options for the ending.
    Though if it was an old lift/elevator it could have been sand from the sandbag used as a counter weight.

  5. Charli Mills says:

    That was an unexpected rush to the carpark. Great details for reactions and then the unexpected discovery of sand in the end. Like Irene, I really felt this as the rush of time and it says so much about our norms and denial of time passing by so quickly. Thank you for joining in at Carrot Ranch!

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