Prompt Nights – Nothing is more memorable than Scent – The Girl on the Train


6904473-bright-abstract-flowersWrite a poem or prose piece regarding the subject of scent.

I’d see her on the train,

As she passes she lingers in my nose.

Some days an overwhelming aroma

As if she’s accidentally tipped the perfume over herself.

I feel my senses being attacked,

Overpowering and unsavoury.

It was the vanilla I most dislike

It assaults me,

I want to shake her out of my nose.

I turn away and breathe deeply

Exorcising her from me.

Some days she has it right

The fragrance of a garden

My senses are lured by her

Enjoying the sensuousness of the game.

I am with her now

Wanting and needing her closeness

Breathing in all that I imagine she is.

The train stops, she alights,

All trace of her vanishes

I am left with the mundane

The odours of featureless workers

So I drift back into my fantasy.


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19 Responses to Prompt Nights – Nothing is more memorable than Scent – The Girl on the Train

  1. Sumana Roy says:

    delightful lines…

  2. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    This is absolutely stunning Michael 😀 you have captured both sides of the coin i.e. how scent manages to govern our senses and how it repels. Beautifully penned. Thank you so much for participating at Prompt Nights 🙂 and for your constant love and support ❤

    Lots of love,

  3. Some perfumes assault and some excite or soothe, your poem points this out delightfully

  4. Your second line make me squeal. I was sure it was going to be my favorite from the entire poem, then I continued reading… You, my dearest Michael, do magic with scents. I love everything you’ve weaved out of the sense of smell, of feeling, of wanting (and not). ♥

  5. ghostmmnc says:

    Love the way a person’s imagination can create a story of someone you only see (and smell) on public transportation. 🙂 You’ve brought this out very well.

  6. Jae Rose says:

    What an intoxicating write – some people have an aura that we love to sup up..

  7. When we run into people like that, day after day, isn’t it fun to imagine their life stories? This is a tease for some short fiction, Michael.

  8. Khaya Ronkainen says:

    Beautiful and intriguing poem! When I read, “Some days she has it right” I couldn’t help but laugh :-). You really make her come alive with the depiction of all the different scents she wears.

  9. georginamorley says:

    I love this piece….such energy in the reactions to the different scents…hate and love inspired by the same being. XXX

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