Today’s #maydays prompt how about a bit of competition.
I’m in the supermarket minding my own business
My son sits in the trolley counting jellybeans.
My archenemy Roger Bent comes up beside me
His young son Snotface I call him sits in front.
The kids know of our rivalry
It begins innocently
I nod towards Roger in recognition
I see Roger whisper to Snotface
Snotface says; “My dad is better than your dad.”
My son quick to defend his dad says: “No.”
A boy of few words my son.
There’s a special today on Breadbaskets
Roger tells Snotface to keep look out
At the end of the aisle I spy them
Suddenly it’s a sprint to the finish
Our trolleys clash several times
Our sons are thrown about
They scream in terror one moment delight the next
A solitary breadbasket awaits us
It’s neck and neck
I put out a foot
Roger trips and falls
“Oh dear how sad,” I think.
The last breadbasket is mine
I covet it as I wander back past the defeated Roger
Snotface is furious; he is now more snotfaced than ever.
I grab a box of tissues; drop them into their trolley
High five my son as we in triumph depart.
Later I wonder what the hell I’ll do
With the victorious breadbasket.
Written for: https://new2writing.wordpress.com/2016/05/02/maydays-prompt-odds-are-on/
Quite a bit of fun, but what is an Australian Breadbasket — the usual wicker-woven basket sometimes with materialed-bottom — for proffering warm rolls covered by a cloth napkin? Or is it something else hence the capital B? Just being nosy to distract as should be getting ready for an appointment.
Anyway, very comical description of rivalry — don’t usually see men competing in the grocery store. Wait, may be I have seen . . . .
I think you describe the bread basket well. The capital B is a red herring…lol.. Or typo……or just tired carelessness.
Thanks for stopping by.
Hahahaha! That was quite the battle for a breadbasket! Hilarious!
Hi Joy, thanks for stopping by and enjoying the fun.
I love the idea of a battle within the supermarket… And with two dads as opposed to the mothers! Brilliant!
Here is the link you asked for, https://angietrafford.wordpress.com/2016/05/02/story-a-day-day-two/
Thanks Angie glad you could stop by. Thanks for the link.
Hahahaha! Excellent what a great trolley dash! Very competitive from the off. Great story and thank you so much for taking part. KL ❤
Competition can be like that I find. Looking forward to the next prompt.
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What a fantastic battle of wills (and trolleys). A great response to today’s #Maydays challenge. KL ❤
Thanks for the reblog.
Great interpretation of the prompt. I like how your main character won but doesn’t know what he’s going to do with the breadbasket.
It’s one of those situations where you win at all costs but have no idea what to do with the spoils of victory. Thanks for stopping by Mandi.
It is noted that Snotface had to be told what to say by his father, whereas your boy answers for himself–clearly and to the point–probably without even looking up from counting the jelly beans.
Ha! what an ending 🙂
Yes my kid was always going to be the superior one…lol…..though why he’d be counting jelly beans is a worry…..
…because he’s going to share them equally with his daddy 🙂
One lives in hope though most kids like the majority of the share….
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