Photo Challenge #104 – Floating


Image: Brooke Shaden

I feel myself floating, drifting up

It’s eerie, I don’t understand

Below me ants mill around

There is confusion,

I feel frantic

I am suddenly afraid, is this?

Beside me my mother long dead stands

I feel the remembered softness of her hand

Resting on my shoulder.

I feel the jolt run through me

She pushes me down, ever so gently

Looks at me with that knowing mother smile.


I awake, dazed, confused

I am tied down, tubes everywhere.

I hear click, ping, whoosh, hiss, beep

As a plethora of machines battle to keep me alive.

I sense someone near me

A nurse checks a connection

Looks at me, her eyes light up to see me awake.

I hear my prognosis

A wave of grief consumes me

I turn away

In denial I don’t want to hear

Don’t want to know

A future, what future?

I remember my mother, her touch

Her knowing look.

What were they thinking

Sending me into this hell?


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20 Responses to Photo Challenge #104 – Floating

  1. mandibelle16 says:

    Such vivid imagery and feeling. Such loss in the end, “this hell,”

  2. so much told in this. Very heart touching 👍

  3. Bastet says:

    Ah yes … something one really dreads waking up to I think … a very vivid write Micheal … gave me a shiver and evoked a tear I must admit.

  4. I like where the picture took you. Really well done

  5. wildchild47 says:

    Brutal. But brilliant in raw contemplation.

  6. Your words invoke the image so strongly Michael, powerful and heart-rending

  7. Oliana says:

    Ouf, Michael, you describe such a vivid image…touched the heartstrings.

  8. NEKNEERAJ says:

    I love the tale and the message. Suits my tastes very well. Brilliant writing, Michael.

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