It has come to my attention that within the blogging world that you are a person of some integrity and experience as a person of learning and discernment.
I am a fledgling writer and poet and I am seeking your opinion of my latest Poem – Dirt in the Toenails – published this week on my blog – I Wanna Be A Writer.
It is important to me to garner opinions from such folk as yourself as your thoughts can only enhance the credibility of myself as a writer. I am currently gathering a collection of my poems for publication and a self-published anthology tentatively entitled “Explorations within my Twisted Mind”.
I await your thoughts and if you could reply by tomorrow that would be great.
With anticipated thanks
Dear Mr Worthington
I wish I could say your poem is something to be described but I find after several readings it to be more in the indescribable range for me.
Now this could be a generational thing as I imagine I am several generations older than you but I do question this poem in this way:
What point are you trying to make?
Do you actually know what a literary convention is?
Who you think your audience is for a poem of this kind?
I do question the self-indulgence contained with in the lines:
I pick at you with my dinner fork
But you refuse to budge
So I shovel another piece of steak in
As your very presence haunts my soul.
I’m not sure how ready the world is to read about your struggles, inner and allegedly outer over dirt in your toenails.
Nor do I think images such as:
Infiltrating my life like a small African tribe
Might not be construed as a bordering on racism…
It is one argument to say that literature should challenge your audience but I find your work works more like a case of common assault upon my senses and for that alone you should be locked up and kept well away from any writing implements thus sparing us from any more drivel of the kind you have foisted upon me.
I hope this is constructive criticism and you will act accordingly by abandoning all and any ambitions towards being a writer of any sort.
William Hewitt PhD, MA (Hons) Professor of Classics Morpeth University.