Mondays Finish the Story – August 10th, 2015 – Jez


Finish the story begins with:  “Where did they go?”

Jez looked sheepishly around. Not a sound. Not a sight of….. But he knew what he had seen.

They were here one second and gone the next.

Not an apparition. He was sure of that. He didn’t think you made eye contact with apparitions.

He searched among the ruins for some sign that might validate his sense of bordering upon encroaching insanity. He had this feeling of intense anxiety, like he had something to prove and prove it he would. He could sense them, just out of sight, out of reach, teasing him as they had this past day and a half.

In his mind he could hear them tittering to themselves as they led him on this merry chase. He began to wonder if their plan was to wear him down to a state of exhaustion and then feast upon him as they had Carson, his one time offsider.


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17 Responses to Mondays Finish the Story – August 10th, 2015 – Jez

  1. where did they go? intriguing, Michael…

  2. HumaAq says:

    An undisclosed mystery. Interesting way of ending the story

  3. How horrible it would be to feel that you are being hunted to be someone’s meal. Very mysterious and foreboding feeling. Excellent!

  4. Valida Faire says:

    This drew me in, perhaps because for awhile I was bothered by periodic visits from an apparition–So your line, “He didn’t think you made eye contact with…” had me pondering, trying to recall if I had or not. I don’t think I did–I just had the very disturbing sense of real presence; my best guess was that it may have been my biological father (mysterious early death…long speculative story). Terribly frightening, as it/he would wake me in the middle of the night–so the presence was truly “felt”, as if someone were physically there. I finally resolved the problem by moving my bed, and closing the closet door…

  5. Love it, especially how to made even tittering sinister! I actually shuddered lol

  6. babso2you says:

    Creepy and oh, so good! I love the first sentence in the second paragraph.. Tense! Great finish too! Thanks for sticking with me and this challenge Michael. I appreciate it! Be well my friend. ^..^

  7. afairymind says:

    Very creepy! I love the ending – I hope he manages to avoid becoming dinner.

  8. Lyn says:

    Great take on the prompt, Michael. I could see this as an episode of The Twilight Zone 🙂

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