MeetingTheBar ~ FormForAll: Paradelles

2014-07-29 20.45.51

Train tracks ratatatat, the journey south began

Train tracks ratatatat, the journey south began

Collected a mate resplendent in red and conversation

Collected a mate resplendent in red and conversation

Tracks red in conversation, train south ratatatat,

Mate began the collected journey resplendent.

 

Off to view artistic sons latest art installation

Off to view artistic sons latest art installation

Thomas Street he said, it’s the energy building

Thomas Street he said it’s the energy building

Thomas said view latest sons art building

Off street artistic installation.

 

250,000 mirrored glass beads lit in magnificence

250,000 mirrored glass beads lit in magnificence

Mouths agape in wonder, cameras flashing like madmen

Mouths agape in wonder, cameras flashing like madmen

250,000 magnificence madmen flashing glass

Beads mirrored cameras like mouths in wonder.

 

Red 250,000 train beads mirrored the madmen

Red 250,000 train beads mirrored the madmen

Thomas in magnificence wonder said ratatatat

Thomas in magnificence wonder said ratatatat

Magnificence madmen ratatatat in red wonder

Thomas said 250,000 mirrored train beads.

 

The paradelle is a 4-stanza poem, where each stanza consists of 6 lines.
For the first 3 stanzas, the 1st and 2nd lines should be the same; the 3rd and 4th lines should also be the same; and the 5th and 6th lines should be composed of all the words from the 1st and 3rd lines and only the words from the 1st and 3rd lines.
The final stanza should be composed of all the words in the 5th and 6th lines of the first three stanzas and only the words from the 5th and 6th lines of the first three stanzas.

Written for: http://dversepoets.com/2014/07/31/meetingthebar-formforall-paradelles-i-have-obviously-lost-my-mind/

The photo is from my trip yesterday, my son’s art work all 250,000+ beads. Mirrored in the image is my mate, resplendent in red.

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31 Responses to MeetingTheBar ~ FormForAll: Paradelles

  1. Gabriella says:

    Can I feel the proud father glowing in this poem? Congratulations to your son, Michael! This is very impressive.

    • Thank you Gabriella. He is a busy man, in two weeks he is exhibiting at the Melbourne art fair. A piece in his current Sydney exhibition has been purchased by the national gallery of Australia. He was offered a spot in the Paris art fair but declined, not enough time to be ready.

  2. JackieP says:

    Beautiful art work Michael. Such a talented son. You did a paradelle rather well. I didn’t even know what it was till I read about it. I don’t think it would be that easy to do. So good for you!

  3. brian miller says:

    wow that is really cool that you son had an exhibit…and cool art too….yeah i can hear the proud papa in your voice…ha….nicely told through form as well….and i like me some magnificient madmen…ha.

  4. Lyn says:

    It may have just been my imagination, but there seemed to be the motion of a train all the way through that 🙂

  5. RoSy says:

    This type of poetry is new to me.
    Thanks for introducing it via a prompt.

    What a work of art!
    Congrats to your son on his success!
    I bet you’ve got a permanent smile plastered on your face. 😉

  6. Sumana Roy says:

    this poem is like a beautiful celebration…proud moments are lovingly expressed…& nice use of the form.

  7. Bryan Ens says:

    Live the line about being resplendent in red and conversation. Great paradelle

  8. A proud dad indeed, it’s beautiful. Well done on the prompt Michael.

  9. Kathy says:

    From train ride to art, to madmen photographers…very nice Paradelle..congrats on your son’s accomplishments.

  10. Mary says:

    Michael, I like the way you worked a real situation into a paradelle. Nice rhythm to this poem. The paradelle form, along with your word use, really helps give the reader the feeling of traveling along the tracks, I think.

  11. Such delight in those beads.. Your son is gifted 😉

  12. rmp says:

    the art piece is stunning. I was entranced by the picture even before I started reading…

    you weaved your words quite well…I particularly liked the 5&6 lines in the 3rd stanza. very nicely done.

  13. Thank you rmp for your lovely comment I very much appreciate it.

  14. such a beautiful expression of pride and what a traveling companion resplendent in red – just love that word – resplendent! thank you for taking us to see your sons stunning installation! K

  15. Bodhirose says:

    I like that we had a photo of your son’s art to accompany your story. Well done and congratulations on having such a successful, artistic son.

    • Thank you so much, his work is gathering a very popular following. His work features on t-towels, plates, soon a range of scarves will be be available. All very exciting. I appreciate your comment.

  16. Polly says:

    Smashing pic and paradelle – love it that we all had fun with this prompt…and what a talented son you have, thanks for your generosity in sharing his work…I’d be proud too 🙂

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