Train tracks ratatatat, the journey south began
Train tracks ratatatat, the journey south began
Collected a mate resplendent in red and conversation
Collected a mate resplendent in red and conversation
Tracks red in conversation, train south ratatatat,
Mate began the collected journey resplendent.
Off to view artistic sons latest art installation
Off to view artistic sons latest art installation
Thomas Street he said, it’s the energy building
Thomas Street he said it’s the energy building
Thomas said view latest sons art building
Off street artistic installation.
250,000 mirrored glass beads lit in magnificence
250,000 mirrored glass beads lit in magnificence
Mouths agape in wonder, cameras flashing like madmen
Mouths agape in wonder, cameras flashing like madmen
250,000 magnificence madmen flashing glass
Beads mirrored cameras like mouths in wonder.
Red 250,000 train beads mirrored the madmen
Red 250,000 train beads mirrored the madmen
Thomas in magnificence wonder said ratatatat
Thomas in magnificence wonder said ratatatat
Magnificence madmen ratatatat in red wonder
Thomas said 250,000 mirrored train beads.
The paradelle is a 4-stanza poem, where each stanza consists of 6 lines.
For the first 3 stanzas, the 1st and 2nd lines should be the same; the 3rd and 4th lines should also be the same; and the 5th and 6th lines should be composed of all the words from the 1st and 3rd lines and only the words from the 1st and 3rd lines.
The final stanza should be composed of all the words in the 5th and 6th lines of the first three stanzas and only the words from the 5th and 6th lines of the first three stanzas.
Written for: http://dversepoets.com/2014/07/31/meetingthebar-formforall-paradelles-i-have-obviously-lost-my-mind/
The photo is from my trip yesterday, my son’s art work all 250,000+ beads. Mirrored in the image is my mate, resplendent in red.
Morpethroad 
Can I feel the proud father glowing in this poem? Congratulations to your son, Michael! This is very impressive.
Thank you Gabriella. He is a busy man, in two weeks he is exhibiting at the Melbourne art fair. A piece in his current Sydney exhibition has been purchased by the national gallery of Australia. He was offered a spot in the Paris art fair but declined, not enough time to be ready.
Beautiful art work Michael. Such a talented son. You did a paradelle rather well. I didn’t even know what it was till I read about it. I don’t think it would be that easy to do. So good for you!
Thank you Jackie for reading and your generous praise of my sons art.
wow that is really cool that you son had an exhibit…and cool art too….yeah i can hear the proud papa in your voice…ha….nicely told through form as well….and i like me some magnificient madmen…ha.
Thanks Brian. He has an exhibition currently at a gallery in Sydney and is working to exhibit at the upcoming Melbourne art fair in two weeks. He is a busy man.
It may have just been my imagination, but there seemed to be the motion of a train all the way through that 🙂
Well the journey was a long one both ways, maybe the rocking motion has stayed with me. Thanks Lyn for your comment.
This type of poetry is new to me.
Thanks for introducing it via a prompt.
What a work of art!
Congrats to your son on his success!
I bet you’ve got a permanent smile plastered on your face. 😉
Well they suggest I have something plastered on my face to stop scaring small furry creatures. Thanks RoSy his work is pretty amazing.
this poem is like a beautiful celebration…proud moments are lovingly expressed…& nice use of the form.
Thank you Sumana I appreciate your lovely comment.
Live the line about being resplendent in red and conversation. Great paradelle
Thank you Bryan I appreciate your comment. Good fun playing with the words.
A proud dad indeed, it’s beautiful. Well done on the prompt Michael.
Thank you Jenny, he’s a clever boy.
That he is, takes after his teacher dad 🙂
From train ride to art, to madmen photographers…very nice Paradelle..congrats on your son’s accomplishments.
Thank you Kathy, glad you enjoyed my ride…..and he is a clever young man.
Michael, I like the way you worked a real situation into a paradelle. Nice rhythm to this poem. The paradelle form, along with your word use, really helps give the reader the feeling of traveling along the tracks, I think.
Thank you so much Mary, it was an interesting fun prompt to try.
Such delight in those beads.. Your son is gifted 😉
Thank you Bjorn, he is indeed.
the art piece is stunning. I was entranced by the picture even before I started reading…
you weaved your words quite well…I particularly liked the 5&6 lines in the 3rd stanza. very nicely done.
Thank you rmp for your lovely comment I very much appreciate it.
such a beautiful expression of pride and what a traveling companion resplendent in red – just love that word – resplendent! thank you for taking us to see your sons stunning installation! K
Thanks Kathleen we had a good day. I appreciate your comment, thank you again.
I like that we had a photo of your son’s art to accompany your story. Well done and congratulations on having such a successful, artistic son.
Thank you so much, his work is gathering a very popular following. His work features on t-towels, plates, soon a range of scarves will be be available. All very exciting. I appreciate your comment.
Smashing pic and paradelle – love it that we all had fun with this prompt…and what a talented son you have, thanks for your generosity in sharing his work…I’d be proud too 🙂
Thanks so much Polly my son is doing very well in the art world.