My poetry is lacking
It’s confusing
I know it is.
I struggle with form
I toil with rhyme
I’m so lost most of the time.
As for metaphor I am a rabbit caught in headlights.
Similes I’m just as puzzled as I can be.
As for alliterations just what is that?
Deadly, dangerous and dastardly if you ask me.
Then on top of that there are a multitude of devices
Each equally mystifying
With little rain, pain or gain.
I wish I could assonate.
My teacher says I should personify
What? I asked.
Tables have legs, needles eyes,
Noses run and zippers have teeth.
I am so perplexed
I have no idea
Confusion has overwhelmed me.
I’ll just sit here a little longer
Tethered to my own ineptitude.
Morpethroad 
I don’t know when you wrote this, but I think it has a place just how it is ..it is totally confusing writing poetry, as you have aptly described and I don’t think your lacking. 🙂
You don’t? Oh that is nice, I think I may be a bit tongue in cheek do you think? Thanks Jenny for reading and your very kind comment.
Perhaps a little… us writers can be that way & you are welcome 🙂
Yikes…could have been me not so long ago…oh those alliterations not to speak of the iambic pentameters …over-done metaphors and similies or the strange personifications of zippers!…have you been going to poetry writing classes lately or just been writing for one of those long-haired poetry sites? They are a writer’s bane! 🙂
No classes Georgia a little tongue on cheek mostly. Poetry allows me to play language and I do. Thanks for your great comment.
Ah…playing with the language now are we…it was fun to answer your tongue in cheek a little cheekily 😉
Very nice! The artwork is fabulous! Did you do it yourself? It has a familiar style.
Thanks Larry, no the artwork is not mine.
Hey, is your refidgerator running?
Better go catch it!
Har, har, har…
Hardly Michael :-)You rock!
Thanks Atreyee you flatter me, but thanks anyway.
Bosh!You really ARE good M!
Now this was certainly me last month! Poetry is beautiful, but I don’t think it has to be so darn uncomfortable to read or interpret. Some yes, but not yours. You always do a wonderful job Michael, and we readers always know what you are trying to say.
Thanks Jackie happy you get my point. Please keep reading my poems.
Oh no problem Michael, happy to read all your write.
That gave me a good morning giggle, Michael. Personification confuses me…noses run and feet smell. I just can’t get my head around that one 😀
Ha, good one Lyn, combs have teeth a well. Thanks so much and it is confusing at times….
I can totally relate – poetry is mystifying. I fiddle about with haiku but then read what others have written and realise my efforts are often clumsy and inept. What’s worse is when I read the poetry others post on their blogs I often only understand the occasional word – as to the meaning – I haven’t a clue.
It can be a challenge I agree. Thanks for your comment.
I’ve wondered if the incomprehensibility of some poetry isn’t an example of inferior writing . What do you think?
🙂 – the thought has crossed my mind.
No two people are the same,we use language reflecting our personal contexts. Therefore we respond according to where our intellects are at that time. You may not understand today, but a year from now you might.
Thanks for the private response to my question. I enjoyed it.
Haha this made me smile and this is so not what I see in your beautiful poetry!! But I know the feeling…some forms takes a calculator for me to follow so I shy away from them {chuckles}
Thanks Oliana, it is a little tongue in cheek.