Clancy be getting’ over here
What?
It’s a feckin’ body in the water.
No it can’t be.
It is and look the poor feck’s got a hook through his cheek.
You don’t die from a hook through your cheek.
Yer feckin do if it’s tied to a dirty great rock.
The old guy’s been murdered?
I’d say that’s a fair bet Clancy; hardly the sort of thing you do to yourself now is it?
Now I wonder what he did to deserve this?
Could have some thing to do with the feckin’ bream shoved in his mouth you think?
My contribution to Friday Fictioneers and apologies to anelephantcant, couldn’t resist the temptation!!!
Morpethroad 
Dear Phyllis,
Wonder who murdered the old guy and shoved a fish in his mouth. Thanks for the new word. I had to look up “bream”. You could use and apostrophe in “guys been murdered” otherwise more than one guy was murdered. 😉
Fun dialogue. I’m sure Elephant will forgive you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle, that Tackas he’s Irish you know. Not big on the grammar side of things.
Oops, sorry I got your name wrong. Kind of you not to point that out, Summerstommy. Boy is my face red!
It’s ok I did notice but then again it could be my real name, then again if you look about on my blog you’ll probably see what it is. It’s Christmas Rochelle, good will towards all men and women.Have a good one, this is a fun challenge every week.
Ha! Michael…it’s definitely not Phyllis. 😀
It is Rochelle, please call me that if you wish.
Ha ha! You might enjoy my name’s post! I met my “cousin” on the blogs by calling her a different name. Who knew?
AnElephantCant remember the last time
He had such a big belly laugh
Rochelle is the silliest
She calls Tommy dear Phyllis
But that Irishman Tackas is just daft
Listen to me now you big feck what the feck are you on about calling a god fearing Irishman daft. You feckin Scots are all the same, but I know it was you shoved the bream down the old feck’s throat. Come on now own up and I’ll go easy on ya!!!
I am not getting in between you and AnElephant. Al and I were in danger of being killed today….he must have taken it easy on us….
Gulp
Lucky you, I saved you both from a fate worse than an elephant ending.
I am still looking over my shoulder…he likes sneak attacks.
Good to be wary…you never know when he come at you from your blind side….lol
I may have to take him out again…..think my accomplice messed up.
Getting good help is hard these days…
*sigh*
A hook through the cheek and tied to a rock… too awful to contemplate. Convincing dialogue.
Thanks Sandra. It is isn’t it.
I read this after reading AnElephant’s story and it is the perfect run on 🙂
Thanks Al, I just saw this as a sequel and couldn’t resist the temptation.
You did it really well. It was fantastic.
Thanks mate, i appreciate you saying that. Enjoy the Christmas break.
You too. Hope Santa brings you every you want. Like that female elf dressed in a Santa outfit 😉
One lives on hope Al….same to you, I am sure Santa will be generous.
Okay, now that I’ve read AnElephant’s tale, I understand 🙂
A very effective sequel!!!
Thanks Jan, it was a fun write.
Brill 🙂
Thank you Helen, merry Christmas to you.
And to you 🙂
Cool!! Great to see Tackas back!! 🙂 🙂
Thanks Helen to perfect person to comment on Anelephant’s crime….lol
Clearly AnElephant’s prequel was a sequel disguised as said prequel, given your swift move to the front of the cue this week! Love the dialogue and humor… dark humor, is one of my favorites. I was thinking that the 2nd to last line should be “NoW I wonder…” Just wondering. 😉 Great job!
PS) I admit to being a wee feckin bit jealous that ye beat me to that first spot! Just a wee bit…
Sorry, i actual fact I read anelephant’s so I thought he was first. Elephants are a bit slow. Thank you for your wonderful comment. Corrected my error, thank you. Lovely to see you again, Merry Christmas Dawn.
If you write it, I will come. 😉 Each and every time. Happy Christmas to you as well!
Love the sequel! That was inspired, I think.
Thank you emmy, it was indeed.
I thought perhaps the old chap was being used fer feckin bait.
Well could be, caught you…lol
Thanks for the comment.
Man. I love the usage of vernacular here. 100 words is a rough spot in terms of connecting the reader with the culture and character — but you accomplished it seamlessly.
I would also like to comment on the dialogue narrative style — great work. I could see these two sitting around talking about the dead guy with a fish stuffed in his mouth. Bravo.
Can’t wait to see more of your works.
CF
Dear muted, thank you for the comment. If you like my Tackas story you would enjoy then the Tackas story: this link I hope will get to them….
HI Michael. What a gruesome way to go! Remind me not to get on the wrong side of you if that’s what happens in your part of the world. Merry Christmas!
Thanks Karen, its just a story in real life I am almost loveable, just ask my friends.
Merry Christmas to you as well.
Thanks for following my blog Karen, I think we may live near to one another.
If the name of your blog is any indication I think you might live up river from me. Goodness, I’m glad you’re almost lovable since you do live in my part of the world.
So I am right, well there you go then. And I see you teach creative writing so that is good to know.
I shall follow your blog thank you again for following mine.
Great voice makes it marvellous to read.
Thanks Patrick.
I can feel my cheek hurting just from the thought of this!
Great dialogue.
Thank you for your comment, it would sting wouldn’t it.
Great fun – I like the Irish accent.
Thank you, it’s a lot of fun the play with.
I like this. And – as I follow anElephantcant that really can – I see a connection here & think it’s pretty cool how both stories work together.
I like that they can still stand on their own too & not be dependent of each other too.
Thanks RoSy, I am glad you see them both standing alone. I just saw this story after reading his.
I looked up Tackas and it’s the plural, in Swedish, for an adult female sheep, which translates to ‘ewes’, as in ‘ewes doity rat, it’s coitans for you’ and that’s exactly what happened to that fecker, now sleeping with the fishes after a run in with Mac the Knife’s doll, who just happens to be a Scottish mermaid called Silkie. (Yes, I read AnElephant’s tale before commenting). I like this:
The old guy’s been murdered?
I’d say that’s a fair bet Clancy; hardly the sort of thing you do to yourself now is it?
Great comedy sketch Phyllis complete with comic and stooge. 🙂
‘Tis always a pleasure now Ann to see you commentin’. I can’t say I all that feckin’ happy about the feckin’ sheep reference, though I am feckin’ impressed with the James Cagney reference. All this Phyllis stuff is causing me a feckin’ worry Ann, am I gender challenged or what?
Oh, what is gender, I wonder, except a social construct to keep us all in line like sheep crossing a field! Now that comment might get me into trouble with a variety of groups … Happy Christmas or whatever you celebrate. I hope your friend is doing better and also your artistic genius son. 🙂
snuck in again – two words … lol I think you know what they are 🙂
Thanks Jenny, two words? The other 98 are?
ha ha ha um well err um pfft
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Great story…or continuation of An Elephant’s story! Must admit, I went over there to see what Tackas had actually come across. Good show! LOL!
Thanks Georgia, this has been a lot of fun, then again Tackas is a fun character to play with.
I’m so glad to have met Tackas and that you continue to use him. He does sound like a fun character to write! Again my compliments on a fun post.
Oh, so sad to see the fish mistreated. Great take on the prompt, Michael!
Thanks Amy, thanks for dropping by.
Now that was great fun! I love the comments almost as much as the story. Great dialog Michael. 🙂 Have a wonderful and Merry Christmas!
Yes these stories with Tackas tend to attract a few comments which is all part of the fun.
Thank you for the lovely comment and enjoy the Christmas at your place.
I think i know who did this!
But I will never tell.
Thank you Dawn, I am confident of your confidence.