I love India.
You do?
Yes, all things Indian.
Oh?
Cricket, I love cricket and curry.
Ever been there?
Once.
Once?
Got lost.
Lost?
Marie’s fault.
How so?
She was running late.
And?
The bus.
What happened?
Missed it.
Oh.
Just a blur.
A blur?
Yes. We stood there like a pair of stunned mullets looking at the back end of our future.
So you got to stay longer?
No. I was frantic.
Frantic?
Frantic, to say the least.
Why?
My cricket gear. We’d booked it on the day before.
Oh.
My career, stumped there and then.
Morpethroad 
Dear Summerstory,
Fast paced dialogue. Made me wonder, though, if the MC couldn’t have replaced his/her cricket gear. 😉
shalom,
Rochelle
No Rochelle, every cricketer worth his salt will only use his own protector, bat, pads, gloves. Superstitious folk cricketers!
Love the story. The short lines mean you fit a ton of story into a few words. That would be heartbreaking, looking for that one special set of gear in a country of a billion people.
Oh yes,a great challenge when they are all so mad keen about the game. Thanks for the comment David
Great dialogue! Apparently the memory still hurts.
Thanks for you comment Gabriella. Yes in old age some memories can be very vivid.
Very effective presentation.
Thank you Sandra
True wit and good dialogue there!
Thank you for your comment. Thank you for following my blog.
Great dialogue and interesting story.
Thank you MissK for your comment.
Oh, that’s wonderful. The back forth of the dialogue made for a fast-paced tale that mirrored the frenzy of missing the bus. And the use of the word STUMPED was brilliant, though I wouldn’t be surprised if you find it’s lost on those unfamiliar with cricket.
Thank you Helena for your generous comment. I did think of all the non cricket readers whom I might confront by using “stumped” in that way but because I love a good cricket story, I thought, the challenge of spinning a good yarn overrode that!
great dialogue – great story. Randy
Thanks for your comment Randy.
The tragic loss and untold side of the story that never was
nicely penned
Thank you for your comment. Yes we will never know.
Loved the cadence of the words. And the story of course.
Thank you yours is a lovely comment
It’s amazing how life seems to always boil down to one detail like that that changes everything. There are so many stories in the “if I would have” or the “if I wouldn’t have”. Very thoughtful story.
Thank you for your comment. Yes so true what can happen.
Cricket is like a religion in India.. Nice fast paced dialogue
Thank you for your comment. India seemed a good location for the story……and cricket well else do they do?
Stumped? Cricket? Haha!! Good one, although not for them. You bowled out that one.
janet
Good one Janet, beautiful delivery…….on a good length as we cricket folk would say!
Speaking of cricket, have you ever seen “Lagaan?” We have it and I don’t know how many times our younger daughter in particular has watched it.
Yes but long ago. From memory good show.
Yes it is the movie about the match going down to the last ball and the batsman is caught on the boundary and see his foot over the line. Yes I loved that show. Also the poms had it stuck to them.
Looked like we had the same idea regarding the form of the story; liked your pun at the end!
Thanks for your comment. Cricket is a game with a lot of words that are so easily used to pun with.
So this guy missed the bus in more ways than one! lol
Yes he did. thanks for your comment.
you painted the scene just with dialogue. Great job
Thanks Carrie I had fun writing this piece.
Hello again. 🙂 What great dialogue, Funny, fast and fun, You do love playing with words, don’t you? And you do it very well too! 🙂
Yes Penny I do. A never ending source of fun and excitement. Thank you for your generous comment.
Love the dialogue!
Thank you. It is a fun way for me to write.
I have always been curious to learn how cricket works. Superstitious like baseball players.
Well yes at least the ones in this story. Thanks for the comment. Cricket like baseball can be a life long passion.
Really like the format here, and what a bummer to miss the bus with the gear! The line about them watching the bus like mullets is fantastic.
One of life’s great expressions that describes so much. Thanks for you comment Zooky.
Ha, nice back and forth-the speed of that gave the story a great overall feel
Thanks Brian for your comment. I like to write in this style.
The mullets line was possibly the best bit I’ve read all week – and I loved the ping-pong dialogue as well – nice!
Thanks Troy. I appreciate your kind words.
Howzat!
A great catch!
Enough rubbish, excellent tale, loved it.
Thanks so much for your comment, fellow knowledgeable cricket person.
I think I bowled a few people over with this one.
Love the short dialogue – like you have to draw it out of him
Thanks Bjorn I appreciate your comment.
“We stood there like a pair of stunned mullets looking at the back end of our future.”
Fantastic line.
And any poetic dialogue that includes curry is okay in my book.
I love curry.
Thanks Tony, maybe a dash of spice in every 100 words might be a good thing?
No clue what Cricket is, but enjoyed the poetry.
Thank you Shirley for your comment. Obviously you are an American, but think how much fuller your life would be with a passion for the worlds greatest game!!
a clever piece. i liked the fast-paced dialogue, it’s really effective 🙂