Reena’s Exploration Challenge #115 – A Weight off His Shoulders

The prompt is to write something that brought about a change in the life of a protagonist, family, community, nation or the world. 

Through the numbness that went with the leaving there emerged a relief, a weight taken from his shoulders and it was several days after he had vacated his home leaving his wife, angry and her heart full of vengeance, his younger children dismayed, his older children understanding.

He had taken the step many thought he didn’t have the courage to do was surprising when it happened.

He didn’t care what anyone thought, for once he was doing something for himself and as much as it pained him to be leaving his children in the ‘lion’s den’, so to speak, he knew they would be ok. Despite her bluster, she wouldn’t do any of them harm, so he thought.

He walked to his new home that first day realising there was no going home, he didn’t have to face the tirade, the finger of accusation wouldn’t be levelled at him today.

He and his wife had grown apart over the years. She was materialistic, wanting a bigger and better home, accused him of neglecting his family, urging him to get an extra job, attacking his very understanding of what it meant to be a husband and father.

Her dominance over every aspect of their lives had run its course. He stepped aside and she was not happy that it was him who brought an end to what in her eyes should have been a marriage blessed by God and one in which their wedding vows meant what they said.

But you can only oppress someone for so long before they react, take umbrage at the situation that was being forced upon them.

Approaching his new home, he felt the weight upon him lif,t and even though he had left with only the shirt on his back, he knew freedom was priceless.


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14 Responses to Reena’s Exploration Challenge #115 – A Weight off His Shoulders

  1. Sadje says:

    Very heartfelt story.

  2. Reena Saxena says:

    I agree that you can oppress someone for so long before they react. A distance is the only solution because nobody changes.

  3. I’m so feeling for this chap, I feel the lift of oppression, the joy of being free. You’ve captured that feeling well. 🙂

  4. Reena Saxena says:

    Reblogged this on Reena Saxena and commented:
    A weight off his shoulder …by Michael

  5. Lyn says:

    Words are not needed for this one, Michael, just a nod of the head 🙂

  6. Indira says:

    Nice take. For the sake of children, people bear so long hoping someday the oppressor will understand and change…perhaps.

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