November 29: Flash Fiction Challenge – Into the Dark

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November 29, 2018, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story using the phrase “into the dark.” What must a character face? Write about an encounter, journey, relationship, or quest. Follow the ship’s lights on gloomy seas. Go where the prompt leads you.

The old man struggled with every breath. In the past week, the darkness he sensed was coming closer. He’d been a man in charge of his destiny throughout his life, and now he was approaching what for him was uncertainty.

He realised he was no longer in control, “I don’t think I can get out of this,” he told his son as he gripped his hand tighter. Dependence was foreign to them both, but together they resolved to be together until the end.

Eventually, the old man’s breathing slowed and the son gave his father up to the dark.

 

Written for: https://carrotranch.com/2018/11/29/november-29-flash-fiction-challenge/

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17 Responses to November 29: Flash Fiction Challenge – Into the Dark

  1. Charli Mills says:

    The struggle is palpable, Michael. A sad and yet beautiful moment of a son’s loyalty to stay at his father’s side when he gave up his control. Powerful!

  2. Sadje says:

    You described the man’s agony very well. I could feel it.

  3. crimsonprose says:

    I like the way you’ve given ‘the dark’ double meaning. And I like the story, liked its sensitivity

  4. A tenderly powerful piece Michael.

  5. Beautifully poignant. I liked that both were independent but they resolved to be together until the end. Just lovely.

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