November 29, 2018, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story using the phrase “into the dark.” What must a character face? Write about an encounter, journey, relationship, or quest. Follow the ship’s lights on gloomy seas. Go where the prompt leads you.
The old man struggled with every breath. In the past week, the darkness he sensed was coming closer. He’d been a man in charge of his destiny throughout his life, and now he was approaching what for him was uncertainty.
He realised he was no longer in control, “I don’t think I can get out of this,” he told his son as he gripped his hand tighter. Dependence was foreign to them both, but together they resolved to be together until the end.
Eventually, the old man’s breathing slowed and the son gave his father up to the dark.
Written for: https://carrotranch.com/2018/11/29/november-29-flash-fiction-challenge/
The struggle is palpable, Michael. A sad and yet beautiful moment of a son’s loyalty to stay at his father’s side when he gave up his control. Powerful!
You described the man’s agony very well. I could feel it.
Thanks it’s based on my real life experience
Hi Kate thanks for stopping by.
lol had some time off air so still catching up with people Michael 🙂
I like the way you’ve given ‘the dark’ double meaning. And I like the story, liked its sensitivity
A tenderly powerful piece Michael.
Thanks so much Di.
Very sad piece, Michael
Yes Robbie it was.
Beautifully poignant. I liked that both were independent but they resolved to be together until the end. Just lovely.
Thanks so much Irene.
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