Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers – Josh’s Hockey Stick


Image: © Yinglan

The last thing we heard was his cry, “There’s something weird under here.”

The last thing we saw was his bum in the air, hockey stick in hand.

It wasn’t unusual for Josh to go exploring and carry his beloved hockey stick with him.

We were finishing off the lunch preparations when Joan looked up and said, “I can’t see your brother.”

“Oh no,” I uttered, “the silly buggers fallen in.”

We rushed down onto the bridge and looked everywhere.

The pool of water beneath us looked undisturbed.

“Josh!” I screamed, “Josh!”

There was nothing but silence. Joan ran for help, and I continued along the waters edge calling his name.

Then I heard him. He was under the bridge. I looked and found him clinging to the bridge support. With coaxing, I got him out, and we both sat on the bridge, soaked but glad to be together.

“Something took my hockey stick,” he said.


Written for: https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2018/03/19/fffaw-challenge-week-of-march-20-2018/

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23 Responses to Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers – Josh’s Hockey Stick

  1. michael1148humphris says:

    You never know what lurks in a photo, or under a bridge. My guess is that it was a Womble on holiday from Wimbledon common.

  2. Iain Kelly says:

    A hockey playing troll? 🙂 good story Michael.

  3. I am thinking that a gator took his hockey stick.

    • Michael says:

      Does it look like gator country? And would a gator play hockey?

      • I am not sure as I live in Florida and I have never seen a gator, but people tell me that they are everywhere. I am uncertain as far as a gator being able to play hockey, but fans of the Detroit Red Wings often throw octopuses onto the ice rink, or should that be or octopi. I guess either is fine as long as they stay in their garden in the shade.

      • Michael says:

        Lol….I guess so.

  4. James says:

    That’s a big fish. 😀

  5. Hahahaha! “Something took my hockey stick.” No wonder he ended up under the bridge – he was trying to get his beloved hockey stick. LOL! Cute story, Michael.

  6. Seems like a lucky escape! Great story.

  7. Lyn says:

    Love your quirky endings, Michael 😀

  8. goroyboy says:

    Perhaps a troll named”Puck” stole it 🙂

  9. Woah, a hockey stick eating monster. Glad I don’t own one, so I’m safe I guess 🙂

  10. athling2001 says:

    Sounds like he is lucky to be out and unharmed. Great story. Wonder was it a troll or something else?

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