FFfAW Challenge-Week of January 2, 2018 – Knee Deep in Water


Image: J.S.Brand

When I died the first words I heard were, “Its okay dying happens to all of us. It’s no big deal, get ready for what happens next.”

Looking around there was a lot of mist and a barrel. In the barrel were marbles and then it began spinning. It stopped, and a marble fell to the floor.

“Number 25,” said a voice.

“Get ready,” said another voice into my ear, “You don’t have long.”

“Here are the rules, follow them diligently,” announced the first voice.

I looked at the piece of paper. “Look elegant, ponderous, stand knee deep in water and oh, gorge yourself on the occasional fish.”

When I relax, I can feel something around my feet and then a bite that really hurts.


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14 Responses to FFfAW Challenge-Week of January 2, 2018 – Knee Deep in Water

  1. Ha ha ha. A great take on rebirth. Loved it.

  2. That last line is so funny Michael!

  3. A clever and amusing piece of writing, Michael.

  4. Bethany says:

    Wow this was really cool. Absolutely love the picture too

  5. Iain Kelly says:

    So it’s all a game of chance as to what we come back as?! Nice idea 🙂

  6. Hahahahahaha! This is great Michael! I love it!

  7. mandibelle16 says:

    Interesting, like reincarnation I guess? Doesn’t sound so bad once he gets used to the fish bites and can eat them too. I can’t help thinking the bites are kind of punishment though. Creative Michael and entertaining as always.

  8. athling2001 says:

    Interesting concept. I got the feeling of a dystopian society mixed with either eastern religion or native America religion. I like the idea of pain leading to rebirth.

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