January 5: Flash Fiction Challenge – The Rattle


January 5, 2017 prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a rattling sound. It can be an intimidating sound of protest, a disorienting loud sound, a musical expression or a gentle baby’s toy. Go where the prompt leads you.

I awoke, disorientated. It was black as pitch. Around me there was silence, except for the rattle. Menacing me when I moved and I feared it.

Shifting to my right the rattle increased in volume. I felt it might rush in upon me. I sat still, the rattle decreased. It never grew silent but rattled softly reminding me of its presence. I’d run, but I couldn’t see. I called for help. Only the rattle responded. The sweat on my brow dripped into my eye as the rattle drew closer. I pushed back, it pushed forward. I closed my eyes.


Written for: https://carrotranch.com/2017/01/06/january-5-flash-fiction-challenge/

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9 Responses to January 5: Flash Fiction Challenge – The Rattle

  1. floridaborne says:

    Lots of suspense packed into a few words, and a possibility of meanings.

  2. Lyn says:

    Not nice at all. Menacing rattles in the dark are no fun 😮

  3. Charli Mills says:

    Excellent use of the rattle to induce terror with it’s presence. You really built up the suspense in just 99 words! Well done.

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