Microfiction challenge #16: Lovers – Felix and Jane


Image: ‘Lovers’ by Felix Nussba

Felix and Jane hurried through the cold winter night. Every so often he would stop and look behind hoping not to see the glint of Jane’s father’s gun.

The discovery of their affair had not met with any favour from Jane’s father. He was not happy and ordered Felix to leave his house and never return and never see his daughter again.

Over the next week they met secretly and planned tonight’s escape. Eloping would not be easy as it also meant leaving their village to never again return.

Jane was conflicted by their decision but her love for Felix had won out, she couldn’t imagine life without him. She had packed a few meagre things which she now carried close to her chest.

With Felix beside her and his arm around her she felt safe, protected and determined to reach their destination. But like Felix she feared her father’s wrath.

Tonight they would become husband and wife, the little church and minister were waiting for them.

Jane huddled in close to the man she wanted to be with, the chilly wind whipped around them but each step was a step closer to a new life.


Written for: https://janedougherty.wordpress.com/2016/09/30/microfiction-challenge-16-lovers/

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23 Responses to Microfiction challenge #16: Lovers – Felix and Jane

  1. A wonderful tale of true love, tension, and suspense. I do hope they are wearing quiet but fast boots. And they are not equidistant between her father’s gun and the chapel. I’m hoping they do take those steps into their new life. With true love and each other.
    Well done.

  2. Lyn says:

    Aww c’mon, Michael. You’re just going to leave us hanging in suspenders like that? 😮 That’s just not cricket!

  3. Soul Gifts says:

    Condensing a story into 200 words is a challenge – every word has to count 🙂

  4. Bernadette says:

    A romance is always welcomed. It makes the world a finer place

  5. mandibelle16 says:

    Love this happy ending. The beginning of something brand new.

  6. It sounded to me as though they made it 🙂

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  8. merrildsmith says:

    I think they made it, too! I hope so.

  9. Awww, they definitely made it. And then it all went sour when she blamed him for taking her into penury and ruining her life…

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