Music Prompt #40 “I Like You So Much Better..” by Ida Maria – Our Full Stops

 

It was true I had to say

I liked you better naked.

Your clothes on the floor

Where they should always be.

It wasn’t always that way

At first you did as all others had done

Run from the very sight of me.

No amount of cajoling worked on you

I was repulsive, vile and unattractive.

But it wasn’t about our physical form

It was the meeting of our minds

The coming together of two intellects

That gelled as never before.

Your desire to be a poet

My desire to be your lover

We met somewhere in the middle

Hawaii as I recall,

Where clothes became optional

I didn’t, you didn’t, we didn’t.

It was on and we rejoiced

As metaphors lusted

And lust metaphored

Verses became stanzas

The stories of our life

Unencumbered by clothing

We made poetic magic

And the magic poetic.

We liked each other naked,

We explored the haiku,

Played with our octrains

Iambic pentametered in the dawn light

Our bits wrote upon each other’s odes

But our full stops, sated our rhythms.

 

Written for: https://mindlovemiserysmenagerie.wordpress.com/2016/04/29/music-prompt-40-i-like-you-so-much-better-by-ida-maria/

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16 Responses to Music Prompt #40 “I Like You So Much Better..” by Ida Maria – Our Full Stops

  1. Our bits wrote upon each other’s odes
    But our full stops, sated our rhythms.

    great lines here, Michael 🙂 I like it!

  2. kim881 says:

    Oh I love these lines, Michael: Our bits wrote upon each other’s odes/But our full stops, sated our rhythms!

  3. Nice to know such things can happen: “But it wasn’t about our physical form/It was the meeting of our minds/ The coming together of two intellects/That gelled as never before. (Oh, and bits part too, 😉 )

  4. I smiled all the way through this one, Michael. I really enjoyed it. 🙂

  5. Sanaa Rizvi says:

    Our bits wrote upon each other’s odes
    But our full stops, sated our rhythms.

    Such an enchanting write Michael 😀

  6. wildchild47 says:

    whoo I feel woozy 😉

    There is nothing quite like …. er …. never mind, this a general rated blog so …. anyhow, intellect is stimulating …. and I love the way you’ve told this little story, playing along the words and forms etc. It’s a wonderful “feel good’ read from start to finish 🙂

  7. Brilliant and maddening!

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