It was true I had to say
I liked you better naked.
Your clothes on the floor
Where they should always be.
It wasn’t always that way
At first you did as all others had done
Run from the very sight of me.
No amount of cajoling worked on you
I was repulsive, vile and unattractive.
But it wasn’t about our physical form
It was the meeting of our minds
The coming together of two intellects
That gelled as never before.
Your desire to be a poet
My desire to be your lover
We met somewhere in the middle
Hawaii as I recall,
Where clothes became optional
I didn’t, you didn’t, we didn’t.
It was on and we rejoiced
As metaphors lusted
And lust metaphored
Verses became stanzas
The stories of our life
Unencumbered by clothing
We made poetic magic
And the magic poetic.
We liked each other naked,
We explored the haiku,
Played with our octrains
Iambic pentametered in the dawn light
Our bits wrote upon each other’s odes
But our full stops, sated our rhythms.
Written for: https://mindlovemiserysmenagerie.wordpress.com/2016/04/29/music-prompt-40-i-like-you-so-much-better-by-ida-maria/
Our bits wrote upon each other’s odes
But our full stops, sated our rhythms.
great lines here, Michael 🙂 I like it!
Thank you LL
Fun piece to write.
Oh I love these lines, Michael: Our bits wrote upon each other’s odes/But our full stops, sated our rhythms!
Thank you Kim, I did have a good time.
Nice to know such things can happen: “But it wasn’t about our physical form/It was the meeting of our minds/ The coming together of two intellects/That gelled as never before. (Oh, and bits part too, 😉 )
Living is just amazing isn’t it….😀😀
I smiled all the way through this one, Michael. I really enjoyed it. 🙂
Thank you Cathy those poetic figures of speech can really get to you can’t they….
Yes, they can. 🙂
Our bits wrote upon each other’s odes
But our full stops, sated our rhythms.
Such an enchanting write Michael 😀
Thank you Sanaa, have a great day.
whoo I feel woozy 😉
There is nothing quite like …. er …. never mind, this a general rated blog so …. anyhow, intellect is stimulating …. and I love the way you’ve told this little story, playing along the words and forms etc. It’s a wonderful “feel good’ read from start to finish 🙂
Hmmm….can’t think of what you are referring to Pat and who’d a thought an ode could so interesting to write upon…..lol
LOL 😉
Brilliant and maddening!
Ahh thank you interesting song to write to Rose….thanks for stopping by.