Image: Louise at The Storyteller’s Abode
My cousin John swore to me that this would be the last castle we would look. I was fed up with castles, steps, stone, dank and dark and most of all guides who bored the life out of me with their monotonous tales of days of yore.
I was at the stage of “Who Cares”. Reluctantly I mounted the steps and trudged upwards. John was in front of me but when I arrived at the top he was nowhere to be seen.
I searched left and right but no sign.
The guide soon had everyone searching. All was in vain.
The afternoon wore on and no John. By days end I was exhausted. I sat and tilted my head against the cold stone. There was movement, the stone moved, a door appeared and there was John looking frantic. He had apparently touched something that opened and when he investigated he was trapped.
For the first time on our trip he was in total agreement with me about this being the last castle.
Written for: https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2016/03/07/fffaw-week-of-03-08-2016/
Atleast he escaped from the trap…. You wove a lovely story. Absolutely gripping!
Thank you Shivangi have a great day.
Wow, thought John was gone for good. He is lucky his friend pushed the same secret panel stone and found him! Great write!
Thank you Mandi, lovely could drop by….enjoy your day…
Leaning against or touching the walls was warned against if he would have read the sign.
Yes indeed had he only looked..lol….thanks so much for noticing…
I also prefer the finding out things the hard way.
Haha! Great story, Michael. Both men are fed up with castles. One because he is bored and the other because he is disappearing into trap doors. 😀
Yes indeed Joy. Thanks for stopping by.
Ooooh!!! You made the story thrilling and witty! HA! Atleast he is safe! 😀
Perfect communion of castles and secret passages!! Love this story.
Thank you Sam you are very kind. Hope you are having a good day.
Curled up on the couch with a cold so grumpy lol How about you?
I’m doing fine. It’s hot around these days so I curl up inside out of the heat…mornings are my time, so much nicer to be out at 6am….
We are crawling into Autumn at the moment.
Are you in Australia?
LOL NO New Zealand!
I’m over the ditch in the Hunter Valley, north of Sydney.
An Aussie lol I still like your writing LOL
Well I followed you as I like yours too. Your in the South Island aren’t you.
Shame on you for guessing LOL I am 2 hours from the capital in the North Island and before you ask no where near Auckland LOL
Ok, I have an older brother lives in Wellington. Been over a couple times and liked it very much.
I like visiting Wellington but happier in my slower paced Feilding with Palmerston North near by. Grew up here and never really left bar some time in Christchurch.
Yeah I understand that. I like where I live too. One day plan to go north of Wellington to have a look. Very different landscape to NSW..
I bet!
Aww…sounds like some ancient walls with secret doors. Glad that John returned. Maybe he had discovered some great artefacts too! Great story! 🙂
Thank you FS, I think he discovered something…being frantic for example….have a good day…
haha! 😀 He sure did! Have a great day too, Michael! 🙂
Nice story. Definitely the last castle. Are there any dungeons on the itinerary I wonder.
I don’t think they were going to wait around to find out. Thanks Jenny…
My worst nightmare! I hate being trapped. Good story
Thank you Jenn, yes its one we all hate to think about.
Haha, glad it turned out alright in the end, but I suppose it turned into an advantage for the narrator. Nicely done!
Thank you Sonya, appreciate you stopping by.
I would definitely be in agreement that it would be the last castle they visited! That would teach him from randomly touching walls and investigating passages 🙂 great story!
Thanks Angie, hope you are having a good day…
I wouldn’t like getting trapped in an elevator, not to mention a hidden passage! Nice story! 🙂
Thank you dear swritings, as always I love having you visit my blog…
Brilliant story.
Thank you so much, I appreciate you stopping by my blog..
Well done! I couldn’t figure out where you were going until the end.
Thanks you Barb, I’m glad you stayed with me till the end. Hope you are having a good day…
What an imagination, Michael! Great story!
Thank you Oliana and happy birthday to you…
Thank you, Michael!! 🙂
I hope you received a large cake with a candle on it….??
Well it’s only 5am here and a weekday. I asked my colleague to get me a cupcake
I’m sure it will be adorned with love and a candle. So 21 again?
I cannot tell a lie…39 😉
That was gonna be my next guess….have a great day…
Lucky John ☺️
Thank you stranger…..hope you are doing ok…
You’re welcome, tired but okay thank you.
I was hoping you were….
They’re just giving up…are they nuts? There are adventures to be had here! Go for it boys 🙂
Some people just don’t have any staying power Lyn. Thanks for stopping by.
I think getting trapped behind a secret door might put me off visiting castles, too! Either that or it would make then even more appealing… An enjoyable story, Michael. 🙂
Thanks Louise, you could be right but on a tour castles and temples seem to be never ending….have a great day..
Surprise for the storyteller – Fantastic Fiction!
Thank you so much. Enjoy your day.
I would love to go on a trip until I became desperate NOT to see another castle… Love that period in history. I do think the ‘being trapped’ would be very scary…. but what a great tale to tell at home!!!