https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IgLm2gInV4A
Could it have been better?
That you came when you said you would.
That you carried your baggage through my door
In an endless steam of suitcases
Each labelled
Trauma one – trauma 2.
Should I have expected any different
When you settled into my lounge
Put your feet on my coffee table
Stretched out and asked for a cup of tea?
You said it was a temporary thing
That you needed a place to gather yourself
But you are still here a hundred years later.
I lay awake at night wondering what will become of you.
Are you forever to stay childlike?
In need,
Playing the emotional card
Your answer to every situation
When stress rears its ugly head
And I watch you retreat into suitcase twelve
The one you never open in public
But rather guard its presence
Preferring to open it a fraction when
Withdrawal is your favoured strategy
And silence your trump card.
Your limpet existence is dragging me
Slowly into an abyss of my own
I now know there is no tomorrow
Just another same shit different day.
Written for: https://mindlovemiserysmenagerie.wordpress.com/2015/10/23/music-prompt-14-kettering-performed-by-the-antlers/
Oh dear, this is a disturbing story…
You think? Thanks J for stopping by….
Did I read it wrong?? Was it meant to be other than disturbing?
Well I guess baggage is disturbing…..but then we all have more than our fair share I think…..the sameness of life J, can get to us after a while….
The ending line sums up the negative, disturbing feel to me. I agree we all have baggage…I don’t know what other comment you would have preferred, to mine. Sorry if I disappointed…
I am never disappointed J keep on commenting as you see fit…..I was generating discussion and look hat I achieved….discussion…..
It’s hard to know what writers want to see in the comment box–which is the reason many people just “Like”, and skip the risk of saying the wrong thing….may explain why I have to change blogs frequently 🙂
Dear J, Write the comment your heart tells you to write not what you think we might like to read….we all have opinions and yours is a valid as anyone elses……its not possible for us to always find agreement with an author and that’s ok as language is a universal medium and we all respond from within the context in which we live…..so go tell it as you see it…..
Will do 🙂
“Just another same shit different day.”
The sense of helplessness and hopelessness of the Ketterings and your piece summed up in that line.
Thank you so much for reading and your comment…..have a good day….
“You are most welcome,” she said. “I enjoy reading and commenting on your writing.”
Well that goes for me too, he said in his late afternoon.
That baggage needs to get kicked to the curb!
Yes indeed, I agree….