FFfAW Week of 06-24-2015 – Esther


There was movement and Esther looked up to see Jasper glide across between the aging tombstones. She hadn’t seen him for a while and was surprised to see him today. Jasper kept to himself as much as a spectre could.

Theirs was a lonely non-existence. Stuck in a limbo, forever to linger among the dead.

Esther had been wandering in this ancient graveyard for well over a hundred years. She’d seen others come and go. But apart from Jasper she had been here the longest.

She wasn’t sure of Jasper’s story only that he was the result of a love gone sour.

Her’s was a love unrequited. At least from his family who did everything they could to not only discredit her but exile her within her own town. Ultimately she had paid the price for her resistance.

Vanished into the night and buried in his graveyard so far from anywhere, no one ever knew whom the body belonged to.

Lost in time, Esther wandered in aimless abandonment.

Written for: https://flashfictionforaspiringwriters.wordpress.com/2015/06/23/fffaw-week-of-06-24-2015/

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34 Responses to FFfAW Week of 06-24-2015 – Esther

  1. tjparis says:

    So atmospheric and well written.

  2. DELL CLOVER says:

    Beautiful, sad, wonderful!

  3. So sad for the spirits that exist in limbo. Poor Esther! Having to exist in that limbo because no one can identify her body because of her lover’s family. Excellent story Michael.

  4. Donna says:

    Great story of life in limbo or should I say death.

  5. mj6969 says:

    Haunting and atmospheric – truly eerie and tinged with sadness. Well written 🙂

  6. luckyjc007 says:

    The spirit hanging around the graveyard aimlessly is so sad. Hopefully, she will discover a way to move forward. Other spirits being there and eventually leaving must be really hard on her. Very neat story!

  7. Francesca Smith says:

    The atmosphere and topic if this piece is haunting and dark to write the least. So obviously, I enjoyed it very much!

  8. mandibelle16 says:

    Michael a sad and haunting story. Poor Jasper, what a story he’d have to tell.

  9. afairymind says:

    Poor Esther, having to watch other spirits come and go. I hope she someday manages to find a way to move on. I’m curious as to Jasper’s story…? A wonderfully haunting tale. 🙂

  10. HumaAq says:

    I love the way you’ve written it, picturesque! Sad story

  11. skyllairae says:

    A day in the life of a specter. Lovely!

  12. milliethom says:

    What a terribly lonely ‘existence’ for poor Esther…to be confined in limbo forever is an awful thought. A hauntingly beautiful story, Michael, and so well written.

  13. Creatopath says:

    A sad story. Poor Esther and Jasper – at least they have each other for company, sometimes.

  14. loricarlson66 says:

    Poor Esther! It must be hard on her seeing others come and go and she is stuck there… thankfully Jasper shows up once in a while… sad, but beautifully written story, Michael!

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