FFfAW 4-8-2015 – The Stakeout


Parsons loved a stakeout.

Usually they happened in some dirt bag part of town.

Today’s was different.

Who’d ever suspect Mr and Mrs Suburbia to be running a drug operation way out here in the Burbs?

He had set up his surveillance in the front room of Mr and Mrs Middle Class, who thought he was there to fix the curtains.

He had attached a camera to their window frame aimed at the house across the street. Parson’s was holed up in his van down the street monitoring the whole goings on when there was a knock on the door.

Opening it he found Mr Suburbia standing there, a machinegun in hand.

His obituary was brief. The end to a curtain repairman’s life, gunned down in a shoot out between two rival gangs.

Mr and Mrs Suburbia smiled as they sipped their morning coffee, for life had a way of rewarding the innovative.

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35 Responses to FFfAW 4-8-2015 – The Stakeout

  1. Lyn says:

    You got all of that from the picture? Michael, your brain has been working overtime. Must have been all the chocolate eaten over the last couple of days 🙂
    The camera…the camera in Mr and Mrs Middle Class’s window, didn’t it catch the whole thing?

    • No chocolate Lyn, more like too much time on my hands…lol…..and the camera didn’t catch his death as he was parked down the street……the camera was after other things….

  2. mj6969 says:

    It never ceases to amaze me how you just sit there (presumably) reading and then bang! The neurons start firing and off you go – and we sit waiting on the other end – and viola! A great and fun read – with – pardon me for laughing – I thinking of the 100 word challenge for grown-ups – such inventive use of language and names. Of course, there is such a wonderful “rounded” aspect to you Michael – we never know exactly what we will read – sometimes too humorous for words, in other moments so deeply touching, combos of big and small – but always wonderful. Have a great …. er …. day/evening/night/morning…..

    • Often the prompt ‘speaks’ to me. Like in this one the perspective of the photo suggested spying on the houses across the street. In the case of the wordle it will often be words I see are connected in some way or in the case of a difficult word I will use them as a character and try and incorporate the words meaning into their behaviour. The beauty of words Mercy you never know where they might take you…

      • mj6969 says:

        A very wise and insightful answer. Clearly you have a terrific imagination and creative spark Michael 😀

  3. mandibelle16 says:

    I liked the ending so quaint and vindictive all at the same time.

  4. Sounds like he should have been monitoring Mr. and Mrs. Suburbia instead. LOL!

  5. Oh, and an excellent story!

  6. Francesca Smith says:

    He was spying on the wrong folks! Great story, it is brilliant how you got all that from a picture.

  7. RoSy says:

    This reminds me of when the police crashed a house in my old neighborhood back in the day. Turns out – it was the wrong house. Oops!

  8. Loretta says:

    I enjoyed reading this… amazing what happens in Suburgatory these days.

  9. mandy smith says:

    This reminds me of a long-run television series we had here in the states, “Desperate Housewives”. I could almost hear the eerie music playing–plots being planned by the least suspected, neighbors peeking out their curtains, whispering. Loved it, Michael! 🙂

  10. Well that certainly was an interesting twist!

  11. skyllairae says:

    Don’t mess with that house. Gotcha 🙂

  12. The prompt did speak to you. Your imagination has been running rampant over the last week. Long may you continue!

  13. afairymind says:

    This is a great twist on the prompt, Michael! Very amusing.:)

  14. milliethom says:

    Brilliant twist, Michael, and an entertaining read altogether. Your imagine certainly went to town on this one. 🙂

  15. married2arod says:

    This totally makes me think of the movie Mr. and Mrs. Smith for some reason. 🙂

  16. Awesome! Did not see the twist, and I always love when that happens!

  17. Ameena k.g says:

    What a innovative take on today’s picture! Mr and mrs middle class sure know their stuff real well!
    Great story!

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