Prompt #78 “Persephone”

Today we are asked to view this video and use it to create our own piece of writing:

Obliged to spend a part of every year there

Like living in the past

Remember when…?

I wanted to believe you were a breath of fresh air

A welcome stranger in my barren land.

And you played the game

Entered into the spirit

Your audience in love with you.

Not a day passes I don’t remember when.

‘That’s a plan Stan.’ I heard you say

Not just once but everyday.

You conjured tricks, word illusions

Left me bereft, a hollow one

As dreams crashed around me.

Finally the telling blow

Your cackling laughter

As you walked away

Arm in arm with hope.

All thought of rebirth

Sizzling to nothing in the summer heat.

Shall I reflect?



A clown in my eyes,

An obscene joke

Its what you feel

When failure comes visiting


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21 Responses to Prompt #78 “Persephone”

  1. Thee video gave me chills. Your words ..cackling laughter as you walked away.. Strong Michael. Lessons learnt.

  2. Wow Michael this is haunting disturbing piece, I also love cackling laughter. Excellent job =)

  3. Lyn says:

    I’m with Ramblings about the video…way freaky…disturbing even. Your poem was…well, it made me want to chuck rocks at the one walking away…or impale them with my metal walking stick 🙂

  4. Very strong, vividly catching the themes of the video! 🙂 🙂

  5. C.C. says:

    “As you walked away, Arm in arm with hope”— no wonder she left him bereft and hollow. Powerful words.

  6. JackieP says:

    The writing was good as always Michael. The video, weird. Or I’m just old. 🙂

  7. J says:

    “when failure comes visiting … again ….”; the cackling laughter, the telling blow — you’ve really combined the video and the myth and the result is so strong.

    You really tackled this video well Michael — it was a tough one — but — had to share it with Yves because it stuck in my mind for days after seeing it.

  8. julespaige says:

    Some myths are just pure …well, bull. I’m not quite sure what the myth was here.
    But it reminded me of ‘The Children of the Corn’ movies.
    I only did a short piece – that I just posted this morning. I like challenges, but horror, which this sort of reminded me of – sacrifices, are just not my cup of tea.

    I think you handled it well. Old ladies and men cackling – just more odd because we at least I am not sure what they are laughing about. A failed hero taken out by the bull.

  9. Oh my! it took everything to watch this…way to close to horrors I hear that I try not to visualize…yuk…but I loved your response, Michael…wow, you made it seem like a dream, metaphor…and brought it to life in your amazing way. Now I will not even try to attempt cos I would have to watch it again…brrrrr

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