Today we are asked to view this video and use it to create our own piece of writing:
Obliged to spend a part of every year there
Like living in the past
Remember when…?
I wanted to believe you were a breath of fresh air
A welcome stranger in my barren land.
And you played the game
Entered into the spirit
Your audience in love with you.
Not a day passes I don’t remember when.
‘That’s a plan Stan.’ I heard you say
Not just once but everyday.
You conjured tricks, word illusions
Left me bereft, a hollow one
As dreams crashed around me.
Finally the telling blow
Your cackling laughter
As you walked away
Arm in arm with hope.
All thought of rebirth
Sizzling to nothing in the summer heat.
Shall I reflect?
Agonise?
Deny?
A clown in my eyes,
An obscene joke
Its what you feel
When failure comes visiting
Again!
Written for: http://mindlovemiserysmenagerie.wordpress.com/2014/10/26/prompt-78-persephone/
Thee video gave me chills. Your words ..cackling laughter as you walked away.. Strong Michael. Lessons learnt.
Indeed Jenny. Thanks for reading.
Wow Michael this is haunting disturbing piece, I also love cackling laughter. Excellent job =)
Thank you Yves, a very challenging prompt today.
It was but the video had so much symbolism within it though I probably went off on a tangent anyhow lol
Well yes but then so did I……its how we are inspired that matters I think.
Exactly XD
I’m with Ramblings about the video…way freaky…disturbing even. Your poem was…well, it made me want to chuck rocks at the one walking away…or impale them with my metal walking stick 🙂
My you are an aggressive soul. Thanks for the comment lyn.
LOL my old boss used to say I had too much testosterone in me for my own good.
Very strong, vividly catching the themes of the video! 🙂 🙂
Thanks Helen appreciate your comment.
“As you walked away, Arm in arm with hope”— no wonder she left him bereft and hollow. Powerful words.
Thanks C.C. appreciate you reading and your comment.
The writing was good as always Michael. The video, weird. Or I’m just old. 🙂
Thanks Jackie, the video was challenging i agree. Thanks for visiting my humble blog.
“when failure comes visiting … again ….”; the cackling laughter, the telling blow — you’ve really combined the video and the myth and the result is so strong.
You really tackled this video well Michael — it was a tough one — but — had to share it with Yves because it stuck in my mind for days after seeing it.
Thanks Jen, this was a very challenging prompt and took a few edits to get it how i wanted it. Thanks for putting it up, I do like the tough ones, makes me think a lot.
Some myths are just pure …well, bull. I’m not quite sure what the myth was here.
But it reminded me of ‘The Children of the Corn’ movies.
I only did a short piece – that I just posted this morning. I like challenges, but horror, which this sort of reminded me of – sacrifices, are just not my cup of tea.
I think you handled it well. Old ladies and men cackling – just more odd because we at least I am not sure what they are laughing about. A failed hero taken out by the bull.
Oh my! it took everything to watch this…way to close to horrors I hear that I try not to visualize…yuk…but I loved your response, Michael…wow, you made it seem like a dream, metaphor…and brought it to life in your amazing way. Now I will not even try to attempt cos I would have to watch it again…brrrrr
Thanks Oliana it was certainly a tough challenge, thanks again for your lovely comment on my effort.